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Origins
the gears in my mind are turning
they go so fast sometimes they spin
and take my imagination off road
into the unknown
the source of all entities great and small
is a question posed in my thoughts
the place the spirits first embarked
upon this journey here in this realm
within visions of memory
I envision a dark place
where I waited in solitude for a spark
something to ignite life
a match for me. a love for all time
someone who understood
space time in its infinite nature
my thoughts bend and warp
contract, expand and evolve
one moment i'm sure of the place I originated
until my imagination reaches new heights
and channels new explanations
I hear a voice question
are you her
who left me here abandoned?
leaving me believing I am alone in all the cosmos
if you be she why involve yourself now?
I don't have the answers
for the questions that press in on me
in a moment I am sure of my course
then I have to admit
humbly, no matter my original source
I am currently on a mission of discovery
I have a flesh body that is weak
it is a trial to me
and no matter who I believe I could be
there is a master plan that includes me
and my learning some humanity
Written by
crimsin
(Unveiling)
Published 21st Mar 2018
| Edited 22nd Mar 2018
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Re. Origins
Anonymous
22nd Mar 2018 00:03am
Brenda.. i get this.. my sister.. by the way you misspelled "source".. stanza 8 line 4.. but this is so heartfelt and pure.. the questions that plague us all.. love you always..
Dave
Dave
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Re: Re. Origins
22nd Mar 2018 00:06am
thank you my brother Dave I was correcting that as you were commenting giggles I love you..
love Brenda
love Brenda
Re. Origins
22nd Mar 2018 00:17am
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22nd Mar 2018 00:20am
thank you dearest Naajir i'm smiling ear to ear with the love you've shown me tonight I am glowing and a restless spirit is greatly warmed by your presence :)
love Brenda
love Brenda
Re. Origins
22nd Mar 2018 2:03am
I love your insights Crim
Our journey to live and learn
Often, neither are easy
but that's what makes us individuals
Sandman
Our journey to live and learn
Often, neither are easy
but that's what makes us individuals
Sandman
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Re: Re. Origins
22nd Mar 2018 2:13am
thank you dearest Sandman
the questions are endless
the answer just one
continue to evolve and grow regardless
the rest will work its self out I believe..
love Brenda
the questions are endless
the answer just one
continue to evolve and grow regardless
the rest will work its self out I believe..
love Brenda
Re. Origins
22nd Mar 2018 2:46am
Damnit this is stunning as always talented Brenda, I was deeply moved by your words! Honestly cussing profanities of praise lol. The flow, the message... I’m just in awe <3
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22nd Mar 2018 3:12am
aw thank you graciously beautiful Nightbird
for the love on this write it kind of just spilled from me tonight I'm so happy you enjoyed :)
love & hugs Brenda
for the love on this write it kind of just spilled from me tonight I'm so happy you enjoyed :)
love & hugs Brenda
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22nd Mar 2018 3:13am
thank you dearest Lawrence for the read and asking actually i'm a Sagittarius :)
love Brenda
love Brenda
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22nd Mar 2018 3:19am
just that Pisces was lit up on the picture....outgoing Sagittarius sounds , from what I know, very much you...life of the party, expansive, energetic (sorry amateur astrologer)...
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Re: Re. Origins
22nd Mar 2018 3:25am
smiles at you yes after you asked I noticed that.. you probably no more about astrology then I my mind is on an endless quest for information there is so much out there to learn :) yes I am outgoing in certain situations and can get suddenly shy if too much attention is shown me.. you are very perceptive :)
love Brenda
love Brenda
Re. Origins
22nd Mar 2018 5:04am
The last stanza is so humble and vulnerable...
There is humanity in humility and this is a testament to growth toward that. Beautiful work (again) Brenda <3
There is humanity in humility and this is a testament to growth toward that. Beautiful work (again) Brenda <3
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Re: Re. Origins
22nd Mar 2018 5:39am
thank you beautiful Atomik I was reading over my latest writes and it occurred to me how arrogant i've been no matter what that's ugly.. I was taught a lesson today in humility and what being human really is about..
I deeply appreciate the love..
love Brenda
I deeply appreciate the love..
love Brenda
Re: Re. Origins
22nd Mar 2018 4:58pm
I never got that impression, but introspection is so crucial, and I certainly believe your claim on that since I know you're a reflective person.
*I hope that made sense*
At any rate, it's a moving piece!
*I hope that made sense*
At any rate, it's a moving piece!
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Re: Re. Origins
22nd Mar 2018 5:01pm
thank you beautiful one for coming through today with some love yes a calm level head and introspection is crucial we must keep focus and not do like me and lose my temper with a worker bee..
love Brenda
love Brenda
Re. Origins
22nd Mar 2018 5:24am
I really like this Crim!! I think we all question where we come from. A very thoughtful and insightful piece. Good job!
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Re: Re. Origins
22nd Mar 2018 5:40am
thank you beautiful Eswaller
yes evolution of our souls continues
where we are heading and where
we originate is still being revealed daily..
love Crim
yes evolution of our souls continues
where we are heading and where
we originate is still being revealed daily..
love Crim
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Re: Re. Origins
22nd Mar 2018 6:40am
thank you dearest Hans i'm having a moment I think realizing my strong proud nature that can be perceived as arrogance..no matter my origins I know there must be learning to keep evolving currently i'm a flesh woman with all it's flaws how can I judge any entity without seeing my own.. so this came to my mind after my heart was reprimanded by me for acting so harshly towards humanity and my views of it..
love you dear Hans..
pardon my rambling giggles
it just came tumbling out..
love Brenda
love you dear Hans..
pardon my rambling giggles
it just came tumbling out..
love Brenda
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22nd Mar 2018 7:44pm
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Re: Re. Origins
22nd Mar 2018 7:48pm
as you were dearest Soldier you are kind and highly evolved I know you will come to the right conclusion for you and yours..
love Brenda
love Brenda
Re. Origins
22nd Mar 2018 12:23pm
We all have our ugly moments,
but I believe our humanity comes
from recognition, reflection, and correction.
Anything else, would be less the human.
Beautiful ponderings here, my lovely.
but I believe our humanity comes
from recognition, reflection, and correction.
Anything else, would be less the human.
Beautiful ponderings here, my lovely.
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22nd Mar 2018 12:42pm
thank you beautiful Teri I learn so much from you dear lady..
you're deeply cherished..
love Brenda
you're deeply cherished..
love Brenda
Re. Origins
Anonymous
23rd Mar 2018 3:56pm
I love that you are actively seeking answers while acknowledging vulnerability. Our flesh is our weakness but our minds are so much more than that...as long as we keep them open. These lines capture that perfectly, beautiful Dark Angel.
"I have a flesh body that is weak
it is a trial to me
and no matter who I believe I could be
there is a master plan that includes me
and my learning some humanity"
I love you...
...ever your Willow
"I have a flesh body that is weak
it is a trial to me
and no matter who I believe I could be
there is a master plan that includes me
and my learning some humanity"
I love you...
...ever your Willow
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Re. Origins
23rd Mar 2018 9:13pm
The road may be unknown but your imagination has no limit, Lady Crim. Fine and (ahem) original work!
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Re. Origins
25th Mar 2018 9:34pm
Lost for words, just in awe of your poetry sweet Brenda
Huge Like and Huge Hugs :-))))))))))))))))))))))))))))
Huge Like and Huge Hugs :-))))))))))))))))))))))))))))
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Re. Origins
6th Apr 2018 3:27am
this is a glorious gospel message of the contemplation of our first swirling of existence...oh how the mind stretches to fit that subject in....so you brought it poetically into view for the mortals to read...thank you my queen
love from the beginning of time
Jeff
love from the beginning of time
Jeff
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