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Fate
you watched me fade
into a dark place
you tried to follow
& was stopped at the gates
my perdition became your purgatory
you waited in the pain
as my torture turned into your own
i watched on as my soul's tears
roll down your face
while i remained captured inside my sin
i fought to get back to you
back to where we started
but there was no way
the way out of hell
remained in front of me
you gripped my hands
to bring me from the brink
i cried & screamed in torment
knowing the only way for us
was for you to let go of me
& so you did one day
now it's in fate's hands
what becomes of us
best friends & lovers
destined to be as one
won't crumble into nothingness
we will live again us two
inside love's warm sunshine
twice blessed
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Copyright © 2018 Crimsin. All Rights Reserved
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Re. Fate
9th Feb 2018 7:29am
I am a strong believer in fate. A great write Crim!! One of my favorite lines is "my perdition became your purgatory." So spot on.
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Re: Re. Fate
9th Feb 2018 2:59pm
thank you graciously beautiful Eswaller I believe in fate too.. it was fate that brought me to my husband.. I cherish your thoughts & visits..
love Crim
love Crim
Re. Fate
9th Feb 2018 7:35am
It’s sad. But sometimes you have to let a person go because the situation doesn’t fit each other’s lives. I too had to let go and keep a piece of what if.
Great write 🤗
Great write 🤗
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Re: Re. Fate
9th Feb 2018 3:04pm
thank you graciously LK for feeling me on this write & understanding the pain of it.. I deeply appreciate & look forward to your visits..
love Crim
love Crim
Re. Fate
9th Feb 2018 8:42am
this touched me in a way I am sure you did not consider when writing it! Very nice I enjoyed it!!!
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Re: Re. Fate
9th Feb 2018 3:06pm
thank you beautiful poetess i'm happy when my poetry moves people that it touched you is unexpected & beautiful :)
love Crim
love Crim
Re. Fate
9th Feb 2018 10:50am
Dearest Brenda, oh how I can relate. Watching love slip away through your fingertips, unable to overcome what ails you.
Let us find at least a sliver of light in the hope that Fate may be kind to us <3
Much love my sister..
Let us find at least a sliver of light in the hope that Fate may be kind to us <3
Much love my sister..
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Re: Re. Fate
9th Feb 2018 11:11am
thank you graciously beautiful Nightbird for such a deeply heartfelt comment yes let fate be kind to us both :)
love Brenda
love Brenda
Re. Fate
Anonymous
9th Feb 2018 2:16pm
The winds of fate are often precarious and it's difficult to know which way they will blow. And when they tear something from us that we love, the pain is sharp and the hollow left behind aches and echoes. But sometimes what's drifted settles back once more where it belongs. Sometimes something more beautiful comes to fill that space. May the fates be ever on your side, my beautiful Dark Angel. You are much loved, my sweet. I love you
...ever your Willow
...ever your Willow
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Re: Re. Fate
9th Feb 2018 2:50pm
thank you graciously beautiful Willow sometimes my muse reads into the future when she speaks to me this has only occurred in part honestly i'm fearful of the prediction of him letting me go.. I hope fate loves me & doesn't crush my spirit..
I love you..
love Brenda
I love you..
love Brenda
Re. Fate
Anonymous
9th Feb 2018 6:59pm
The hardest thing to let go of... but sometimes it has to be that way.
Fate can indeed be powerful though and with enough belief it sees us right <3
Fate can indeed be powerful though and with enough belief it sees us right <3
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Re: Re. Fate
9th Feb 2018 7:06pm
thank you beautiful Sophie yes it is the hardest to let go of.. i'm still holding on to him not letting me slip from his grasp completely..
love Crim
love Crim
Re. Fate
Anonymous
9th Feb 2018 8:50pm
The hopes shines through like beacon in this write...
No light without darkness
No darkness without light
They kinda go hand in hand
They need each others embrace
Beautiful way to show your willing to hold on
Love Autumn
No light without darkness
No darkness without light
They kinda go hand in hand
They need each others embrace
Beautiful way to show your willing to hold on
Love Autumn
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Re: Re. Fate
9th Feb 2018 9:01pm
thank you beautiful Gypsy most graciously for seeing the love that still exists even in the dark..
love Crim
love Crim
Re. Fate
18th Feb 2018 12:12pm
"now it's in fate's hands
what becomes of us
best friends & lovers
destined to be as one
won't crumble into nothingness
we will live again us two
inside love's warm sunshine
twice blessed"
such ideal and romantic love...chosen by the cosmos...never a distance too far
love
Jeff
what becomes of us
best friends & lovers
destined to be as one
won't crumble into nothingness
we will live again us two
inside love's warm sunshine
twice blessed"
such ideal and romantic love...chosen by the cosmos...never a distance too far
love
Jeff
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Re: Re. Fate
1st Mar 2018 1:27pm
thank you Jeff i've seen fate at work first hand she is a guiding spirit seeing us to our appointed destination..
love you thoughts & visits..
love Brenda
love you thoughts & visits..
love Brenda
Re. Fate
Anonymous
19th Feb 2018 2:42am
My love, fate had brought you both together...twice already and I can’t see any reason for another go round...you will remain committed and dedicated to each other just as you have for all these years...it is the way it is supposed to be...best friends, lovers and soul mates...
I love you deeply
yours always & forever
xoxo Taryn
I love you deeply
yours always & forever
xoxo Taryn
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Re: Re. Fate
1st Mar 2018 1:28pm
thank you my love I know you to be wise so I believe you.. I know I just have to apply myself more and not lose sight of what matters most.. our fifteenth anniversary is coming soon :)
I love you passionately..
love Brenda
I love you passionately..
love Brenda
Re. Fate
23rd Feb 2018 8:10am
I believe that some things are predestined it is unfortunate though that some people have to be tortured for such a long time before they gain their prize - I wish all good things to come to you sweet brenda :-)))
Huge Big Hugs :-))))))
Huge Big Hugs :-))))))
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Re: Re. Fate
1st Mar 2018 1:30pm
thank you graciously David I know why the hell I don't know for me it seems its what it took for me to appreciate what fate offered and still I struggle to see..
love your thoughts and visits..
love & hugs..
Brenda
love your thoughts and visits..
love & hugs..
Brenda
Re. Fate
27th Feb 2018 7:22pm
We must walk our path alone! If and when we come out and meet up with our true love then that will be the second miracle!
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1st Mar 2018 1:31pm