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dream girl
death. so heavenly, so pure
she hides so many secrets
only the lucky ones know what they are
im not scared of her, i open my arms to her warmth
when she finally selects me from the rest
i shall smile, and wisper goodbye to few
if only i knew when she was on her way,
then i could start counting.
im so excited to meet the girl of my dreams.
oh death youre so beautiful
you take all my pain and let me play free
youre so incredible, stunning and rare
please let me be next
she hides so many secrets
only the lucky ones know what they are
im not scared of her, i open my arms to her warmth
when she finally selects me from the rest
i shall smile, and wisper goodbye to few
if only i knew when she was on her way,
then i could start counting.
im so excited to meet the girl of my dreams.
oh death youre so beautiful
you take all my pain and let me play free
youre so incredible, stunning and rare
please let me be next
Published 1st Oct 2011
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1st Oct 2011 7:05pm
Very dark but warm. Welcoming not only in meaning but with the feeling and emotion. Good read.
I think you could bring more from this poem, since i love your name, I think you could make this a bit more bitter sweet. Expand on the icredible, stunning and rare...Bring the reader into the begging. Show that you want.
I don't know. It's good as it is.
Matthew
I think you could bring more from this poem, since i love your name, I think you could make this a bit more bitter sweet. Expand on the icredible, stunning and rare...Bring the reader into the begging. Show that you want.
I don't know. It's good as it is.
Matthew
