Aaron

beautiful Atomik intense poem
so brilliantly written
your feelings popped off the page
with fantastic imagery..

love Crim

Thank you <3

Your artistic expression needs no validation for it speaks for itself.

May the tears flow through your pen until such time you smile
while basking in the warmth a friendship never to be forgotten.

Teri

I woke to find this comment this morning. Thank you for the sweet words of comfort :)

The lock waiting for a key...  the key insufficient for the lock.   Why is so much time spent awaiting?

A unique love poem
Great writing skills
I admire that

Thank you very much :)

The entire verse is gorgeous, AtoMikOne; however, that second verse is stunning. ❤

Thank you dear <3

So easy to lose oneself in the maze here. Loved it, as per usual from you.

I seriously had visuals in my mind of formal English boxwood gardens while writing this, he was from the UK. Thank you!

I fell asleep while thinking of this poem.  I thought about flow and tension.  I tend to write with the intent to complete my poetic thought.  Your poem leaves the tension hanging, asking the reader to complete the thoughts.  $.02.

My best friend offline was just telling me this over coffee on Sunday! It's a sign, it surely is. My friend (I keep trying to get her to join DUP! Hopefully you'll all meet her at some point, lovely person...) always finishes strong with a condensed and overarching stanza. Her last lines are usually her best.

Yours are often couched somewhere in the middle, like a strong core...and I love picking out my favorites from each of your pieces (obviously, I'm always doing that in the comments haha), although the entirety is always strongly supportive as well.

Lately I've been kicking myself for NOT tying things up nicely like so many of the writers here I admire (you being the very least of all). And I'm not envious exactly, but I am frustrated by my inability to complete things in a way that feels satisfactory. I'm not meant to, I'm sure of it now. I think I simply need to read more A.A Milne (sp?) and the like who possess a similar erratic/open-ended style, and become more at peace with my own.

Just some thoughts :)

I came to poetry by route of blogging.  Decades ago I had been taught that paraphraphs have an opening sentence, the body of the discourse, and a concluding sentence.  The body has the subject material arranged in a way that allows the reader to organize the material in their minds.  Now my poetry follows this arrangement.  I think you're right about how I end poems.  I tend to put a bow on the topic at hand.  This is usually done by looping back to the original starting place of the poem.  The "heavy hitting" is elsewhere in the piece.  In the end, I find myself both supported and restricted by the format I'm inclinded to use.

I was taught that as well actually,  as well as being informed by an English professor in my creative writing class "If you need to explain your poem; it sucked." He wasn't a fan of anything vague, intuitive, or open-ended. Thankfully he graded on assignment completion and not on works themselves, I surely would've failed. He was so dogged, my 17 year old punkass didn't listen to anything. Had I respected him more, maybe I would've altered my style. He never reviewed pieces before we submitted them, or worked with any of the students, he only told us stories from his past all class long beside some crude basics, and allowing us some limited open mic.  I wonder if he actually wrote at all himself. Sorry for the tragic backstory...holy shit.

At any rate, I like your stuff, so it's working :) Funny how things become so ingrained though!

You have a masterful sense of word usage. This has a very classical feel. I enjoy poetry that makes me work for the meaning because I will read over and over to grasp personal comprehension. Brava!

Thank you, thank you, thank you! This means a lot, I wanted to do well in honor of Aaron.

May I ask, who is he?

A friend I met on here, his screen name is neuroticthrillers. He passed away on the 12th of last month.

Oh my, I am so sorry. I was hoping that would not be the case.  A beautiful tribute you've written.

I hope he's at peace. Many thanks, I always appreciate that,  but particularly on this piece :)

It seems you were a good friend to him that was probably a great comfort to him.

wow wow wow, master!
this was so fun to read, i felt like i was spiraling down the largest tree in a fairy folklore, and you are the caterpillar.. like alice in wonderland, truly magical. I want to know more about you, what a wonderful mind to write such a thing.

Oh my goodness...this means a lot. I'm so sorry to not reply right away (and to anyone else) I really have needed a break. His passing made it hard to log on, and other things in life needed prioritizing. I deeply appreciate this <3 Thank you, thank you!

I read this out loud several times as is my want - the word fall beautifully from this haggard face and it lights me up - your poetry is exquisite :-)))))))

Huge like :-))))))

David, your kindness and encouragement I treasure <3 Thank you, and forgive me for not being on more.