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of sunken ships and rusting men
she sailed
the doldrums
the straits
taking aboard
all kinds
keeping safe
keeping sane
till
one day
she sank
the rust
on board
had set in
the
Cape of Good Hope
got her
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Published 9th Jan 2018
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9th Jan 2018 11:56pm
10th Jan 2018 2:19am
welcome
dear Brother!
welcome
is the review.
a tale of carrying on
taking aboard all
despite the conditions
till
the on board rust
gets her
appreciation
immense
dear Brother.
dear Brother!
welcome
is the review.
a tale of carrying on
taking aboard all
despite the conditions
till
the on board rust
gets her
appreciation
immense
dear Brother.
10th Jan 2018 2:02am
10th Jan 2018 2:21am
haha (rusting men).we all are Dadda!
welcome
is the poet admired
welcome
is the review affectionate.
appreciate both
immensely.
welcome
is the poet admired
welcome
is the review affectionate.
appreciate both
immensely.
10th Jan 2018 1:57pm
A wise tale for as we sail.
Sometimes it is best
to scuttle caustic cargo,
less a sea worthy ship be lost
prematurely.
Nice poetic metaphors, dear poet.
Sometimes it is best
to scuttle caustic cargo,
less a sea worthy ship be lost
prematurely.
Nice poetic metaphors, dear poet.
13th Jan 2018 7:38am
well... wisdom
is for others to keep
at the expense of those
who think with heart
yes.
indeed wise
to scuttle the toxic cargo.
welcome
is the wise Friend Wise.
welcome is the depth of insight.
appreciate both
immensely.
is for others to keep
at the expense of those
who think with heart
yes.
indeed wise
to scuttle the toxic cargo.
welcome
is the wise Friend Wise.
welcome is the depth of insight.
appreciate both
immensely.
11th Jan 2018 5:14am
This is good...reminded me of Nietzsche's reminder that the horizon has been wiped clean...we are now free to sail? Great ink CF.
Cheers...Harry
Cheers...Harry
13th Jan 2018 7:40am
Welcome Harry!
honored truly honored,
to know the scribble prompted of
such philosopher's.
well, always the case dear friend, horizon, wiped clean.
appreciate immensely
the visit
the review.
honored truly honored,
to know the scribble prompted of
such philosopher's.
well, always the case dear friend, horizon, wiped clean.
appreciate immensely
the visit
the review.
11th Jan 2018 2:02pm
living in the abovementioned cape, i advise there's no hope.
good or otherwise.
the poem is exceptional tho,
good or otherwise.
the poem is exceptional tho,
if ever, anyone knew
how to humble/honor someone.
welcome
is the friend admired
welcome
is the honor.
well, the promising name of the cape, on the other side of False Bay
many ships there.
appreciation
immense
the visit
the review
how to humble/honor someone.
welcome
is the friend admired
welcome
is the honor.
well, the promising name of the cape, on the other side of False Bay
many ships there.
appreciation
immense
the visit
the review
Anonymous
- Edited 22nd Feb 2020 11:45am
13th Jan 2018 7:35am
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13th Jan 2018 7:45am
you read
absolutely right
dear admired poet.
welcome
is the visit
welcome
is the review insightful
appreciate all
immensely.
absolutely right
dear admired poet.
welcome
is the visit
welcome
is the review insightful
appreciate all
immensely.
Anonymous
- Edited 30th Jan 2023 2:45pm
14th Jan 2018 7:29pm
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20th Jan 2018 6:08am
honored
is the scribbler here
to have even reminded of
your gem.
welcome
is the admired Friend
welcome
is the review
deep and insightful.
appreciation
immense for the honor and the visit AH!
is the scribbler here
to have even reminded of
your gem.
welcome
is the admired Friend
welcome
is the review
deep and insightful.
appreciation
immense for the honor and the visit AH!
Anonymous
17th Jan 2018 11:27pm
Beautiful.
20th Jan 2018 6:06am
welcome
is the Poet admired.
welcome
is the kind review.
appreciate both
immensely.
is the Poet admired.
welcome
is the kind review.
appreciate both
immensely.
