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Hmmmmmmm?
Open creaking church door
Enter stunning creature
Glides across the tile floor
Greets dumbfounded preacher
Gathered a baptism to witness
Guilty assessing androgynous frame
Dressed to reveal physical fitness
Euphoric chemical charges the brain
Turning clockwise surveying the crowd
Locking eyes at nearly half-past
“Pick me” whispered perhaps too out-loud
Gravity defied up comes the mast
Not prone to psychosis but now obsessed
God mother or father they’re not
Strong libertine urges wont allow rest
With mystery gender besot
Sitting together at the reception
In tandem choose the lemongrass tea
Can we abandon all predilection?
At least in beverage we both agree
Question of intimacy still remains
Nebulous answer “we’ll just wait and see”
Enter stunning creature
Glides across the tile floor
Greets dumbfounded preacher
Gathered a baptism to witness
Guilty assessing androgynous frame
Dressed to reveal physical fitness
Euphoric chemical charges the brain
Turning clockwise surveying the crowd
Locking eyes at nearly half-past
“Pick me” whispered perhaps too out-loud
Gravity defied up comes the mast
Not prone to psychosis but now obsessed
God mother or father they’re not
Strong libertine urges wont allow rest
With mystery gender besot
Sitting together at the reception
In tandem choose the lemongrass tea
Can we abandon all predilection?
At least in beverage we both agree
Question of intimacy still remains
Nebulous answer “we’ll just wait and see”
Published 5th Jan 2018
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6th Jan 2018 4:06pm
7th Jan 2018 4:40am
Thank you so much LDF! I enjoy the challenge of rhyming and I enjoyed the chance to interject some humor into this big, what-if question.
6th Jan 2018 8:05pm
"We'll wait and see." Love that ambiguity! Fine work Gahdess, beautifully worded and rhymed. Just get me to the church on time....
7th Jan 2018 4:43am
Awesome "My Fair Lady" reference...now you got me thinking about Miss Audrey. I am glad you enjoyed the flow of this piece
8th Jan 2018 2:26am
8th Jan 2018 2:32am
I am glad. That was my intent. It was fun to write. And it was good to finally write again...I've been in such a rut. Thank you!
9th Jan 2018 2:58pm
Loved the thoughts within this piece.
I will admit, there have been times
when the mood is right, I have found
myself in nearly the same frame of mind
as the character in the poem.
Really feel you captured those times
for me, and the added rhyme, flow and
touch of humor made this an enjoyable read.
I enjoy getting out of the rut, and exploring
new paths, for one never knows where it
may lead. It's like getting lost on a trip when
the arrival time at the destination is unimportant
and you get to spend some time enjoying things
you would never get to otherwise.
Nicely done, GW
I will admit, there have been times
when the mood is right, I have found
myself in nearly the same frame of mind
as the character in the poem.
Really feel you captured those times
for me, and the added rhyme, flow and
touch of humor made this an enjoyable read.
I enjoy getting out of the rut, and exploring
new paths, for one never knows where it
may lead. It's like getting lost on a trip when
the arrival time at the destination is unimportant
and you get to spend some time enjoying things
you would never get to otherwise.
Nicely done, GW
9th Jan 2018 5:50pm
Thank you so much Amorous! I understand very well those feelings. I enjoy your description of having no time of arrival leaving time to explore. Your comment encourages me to continue to write and to better plumb the depth of hidden corners of my psyche.
Anonymous
12th Jan 2018 6:43pm
Love the way you laced humour into this :)
12th Jan 2018 6:54pm
