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the sidewalk's secrets
the sun dappled sidewalk listened
as I stomped out
my discontent on it's obliging face
then with a sneer
& a wink
it spoke to me
told me of all
the stories it's heard
as people release their secrets
to the winding streets
the man with the limp
has a fat wife at home
his back broken from her weight
the man's sorrow is heard
then duly noted by the sidewalk
who leads him to a mistress
on the other side of town
a whore
& her clacking stilettos
scream out her anger
at an under paying john
her rage taken out
on the forgiving pavement
who knows this soul well
children skip to my loo
& ring around the rosy
tickles the sidewalk
their mirth contagious
ripples out
from the soles of their shoes
the utter horror
it feels as a step is forever silenced
murder most foul
an all too common occurrence here
then in a somber tone
it tells me it keeps record
of humanities wanderings
for it is the road where all dreams lead
& our path homeward
Copyright © 2018 Crimsin. All Rights Reserved
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crimsin
(Unveiling)
Published 3rd Jan 2018
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Re. the sidewalk's secrets
3rd Jan 2018 6:42pm
Magical metaphors as always!
I really enjoyed reading this . Couldn’t list my favorite stanzas ... otherwise I would need to copy and paste.
Simply wonderful!
~Wicked
I really enjoyed reading this . Couldn’t list my favorite stanzas ... otherwise I would need to copy and paste.
Simply wonderful!
~Wicked
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Re: Re. the sidewalk's secrets
3rd Jan 2018 6:50pm
thank you dearest Wicked One
there is a big smile gracing my face from your comment :)
love Crim
there is a big smile gracing my face from your comment :)
love Crim
Re. the sidewalk's secrets
3rd Jan 2018 8:44pm
I agree with WickedWays, it's difficult to choose a favorite section :) Lovely write full of expressive imagery!
children skip to my loo
& ring around the rosy
tickles the sidewalk
"their mirth contagious
ripples out
from the soles of their shoes" This whole chunk really made me grin <3
children skip to my loo
& ring around the rosy
tickles the sidewalk
"their mirth contagious
ripples out
from the soles of their shoes" This whole chunk really made me grin <3
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Re: Re. the sidewalk's secrets
4th Jan 2018 5:11pm
thank you beautiful Atomik
i'm so happy to have brought a grin
to your face :)
love Crim
i'm so happy to have brought a grin
to your face :)
love Crim
Re. the sidewalk's secrets
Anonymous
3rd Jan 2018 9:14pm
the contradistinction between whore & innocent children hits as hammer in the face. Excellent write Brenda.
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Re: Re. the sidewalk's secrets
4th Jan 2018 5:12pm
Re. the sidewalk's secrets
4th Jan 2018 2:11am
I just love all the details... and your special way you speak to me through your pieces..
So royal..
<3
H
So royal..
<3
H
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Re: Re. the sidewalk's secrets
4th Jan 2018 5:13pm
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Re: Re. the sidewalk's secrets
4th Jan 2018 5:13pm
thank you graciously beautiful Duende
so happy to have you journey with me :)
love Brenda
so happy to have you journey with me :)
love Brenda
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4th Jan 2018 12:03pm
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Re: Re. the sidewalk's secrets
4th Jan 2018 5:15pm
thank you graciously beautiful Mary Jo
i'm overjoyed with your comment
that it affected you so deeply means the world to me
you really lit up my morning with your thoughts :)
love Brenda
i'm overjoyed with your comment
that it affected you so deeply means the world to me
you really lit up my morning with your thoughts :)
love Brenda
Re. the sidewalk's secrets
Anonymous
4th Jan 2018 2:36pm
My dearest beautiful Dark Angel, you have created a masterpiece of human compassion and understanding, giving a voice to moments that might otherwise go mute. This is a brilliant slice of human nature and the life of a single sidewalk. I do so love you, my beautiful one, so very much
...ever your Willow
...ever your Willow
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Re: Re. the sidewalk's secrets
4th Jan 2018 5:17pm
thank you beautiful Willow most graciously
you should see the smile on my face
that this write was received so wonderfully..
I cherish
& love you..
Brenda
you should see the smile on my face
that this write was received so wonderfully..
I cherish
& love you..
Brenda
Re. the sidewalk's secrets
Anonymous
4th Jan 2018 6:45pm
My love, one would never think an inanimate object such as a sidewalk would hold the lives and history of so many...the carefree, the love, the pain and sorrow...our energy flows from us through our souls (soles) and it is fed into it...Yes...if they could talk, think of all the stories they could tell...and the sidewalk has indeed been given a voice and has spoken here through your ink...you are brilliant...
I love you wildly
yours always & forever
xoxoxox Love Taryn
I love you wildly
yours always & forever
xoxoxox Love Taryn
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4th Jan 2018 7:25pm
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Re: Re. the sidewalk's secrets
4th Jan 2018 9:04pm
my love thank you for getting what I was going for with this write.. you may understand even better than me what this write represents.. I love your interpretations they help me get a new vision of my write..
I love you passionately..
love Brenda
I love you passionately..
love Brenda
Re: Re. the sidewalk's secrets
4th Jan 2018 9:05pm
thank you graciously dearest Hans
for the love you've shown on this write..
love Brenda
for the love you've shown on this write..
love Brenda
Re. the sidewalk's secrets
Anonymous
4th Jan 2018 6:49pm
terrific metaphor!!...way to bring alive the well worn path all souls have left stories on..
magnificent Crim..
Cosmic_Enigma
magnificent Crim..
Cosmic_Enigma
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Re: Re. the sidewalk's secrets
4th Jan 2018 9:06pm
thank you graciously dearest Cosmic One
you gifted me smiles with your comment :)
love Crim
you gifted me smiles with your comment :)
love Crim
Re: Re. the sidewalk's secrets
Anonymous
4th Jan 2018 9:12pm
:)...You are most welcome..keep smiling..you unveiled a unique delight..honestly rare a poem captivates me as this one did..reminded me of all my own lonely and blissful walks on the sidewalk..
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Re. the sidewalk's secrets
9th Jan 2018 2:39am
Wow you are on fire - I think for me this is one of your best writes easy RL add - brilliant :-))))
Huge Hugs :-))))
Huge Hugs :-))))
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Re: Re. the sidewalk's secrets
17th Jan 2018 11:54pm
thank you dearest David
for most graciously you gifted me smiles..
love & hugs..
Brenda
for most graciously you gifted me smiles..
love & hugs..
Brenda
Re. the sidewalk's secrets
17th Jan 2018 11:44pm
Read this on Poems of the Month, you definitely deserve to be there. This is quality and some lines cut to the quick. Very impressive.
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Re: Re. the sidewalk's secrets
17th Jan 2018 11:56pm