Flying In The Grind

Flaws become features when life becomes toil.

I detest cliche; however, it truly is truth that our flaws enhance the unique aspects of our individuality, setting us apart from conformity.

I enjoyed how this changed voice and became a dialogue of sorts between the similes, though I detest 'Like' and suggest the following:

As freckles
bridging my nose;
tawny tattered stars

-Flaws-

whisps of a lisp
lacing, lacking kisses
imperfect blesses

Beginning with 'As' vs 'Like' enhances the assonance of 'a' throughout the stanzas.

Well done! As beautifully unique as our flaws.

Thank you so very much, I don't even have time currently to address this all currently. I'll be back on in an hour or two, and I'll edit. The help is always, always appreciated <3

beautiful Atomik
what some may see as flaws
are beautifully endearing & human to me..

beautiful..

"-Flaws-  


Like the freckles  
bridging my nose  
in tawny tattered stars"

vulnerable with a wonderfully defiant ending..

love Crim

Thank you my lovely friend <3 I know deeply that you're one who sees beyond flaws.

It's a feeling of working hard on yourself.
Attempted mending of straw, like each improvement is a constant struggle.
I've had to work hard on myself too, over years.
It's frustrating, how it takes years of hard and slow effort.
We all have flaws, some people don't even want to work  on them.
However this gives the impression of working very hard to be a better person, great read.

I can detect a lot of that in your work :) Some self-deprecation, and tells of someone who understands their shortcomings, but attempts to grow. Personal growth is painful, but critical. Thank you for understanding!

" idiosyncratic
irregular
jewls... "- ohhhhh pretty and original

"The splinters
struck out
at ajar
Slitting their
shitty
(they were never pretty)
shells "- we're all rough and jagged around the edges,some more so than others; even the porcupines need love too lol.



"When capillaries above pink-diamond
cheekbones blow
wide open
my clamoring for
congeniality "- that was awesome ,and you're kicking our asses with this great vocabulary on this piece.


"I will lick the pain
from my paws
and live off the blood
of tonic
chronic flaws "-you mix tonics and words like a witc....woodcarver, i meant woodcarver lol.

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we read of flaws but saw nothing but beauty

Thank you, friend :) <3

a rusty torso
& awful arm-like
(not artful)  - -  - - this hit me like a bullet as did the rest of this fierce write - so good :-))))

I appreciate that, your poem did as well for me tonight. A toast, for surprisingly similar sentiments unplanned and uploaded! 🥂