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Tepid
We all deal
with your curb appeal
& oatmeal grade ideals
Invariable, partitioned
false-front
postures...
stand shotgun
as if picket fence
facades
would deter wolves
Status quo
doughy showings
flow
Whitewashed wonderbread
vanilla memos
get yeasty
& overblown
So...
go update your status
with another pasty quote
Tiptoeing
with willow bough
presence
bowing
to curl with the goats
Admitting acquiescence;
And never...
leaving
the boat
with your curb appeal
& oatmeal grade ideals
Invariable, partitioned
false-front
postures...
stand shotgun
as if picket fence
facades
would deter wolves
Status quo
doughy showings
flow
Whitewashed wonderbread
vanilla memos
get yeasty
& overblown
So...
go update your status
with another pasty quote
Tiptoeing
with willow bough
presence
bowing
to curl with the goats
Admitting acquiescence;
And never...
leaving
the boat
Published 10th Dec 2017
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10th Dec 2017 8:45am
some would say safe in the box.
Whitewashed wonderbread
vanilla memos
get yeasty
& overblown
So...
go update your status
with another pasty quote
misrepresentations of salesman
but who wants to project wearing a rag (unless it is the 'in' fashion)?
you cause me to ponder on some thoughts, lady!
Whitewashed wonderbread
vanilla memos
get yeasty
& overblown
So...
go update your status
with another pasty quote
misrepresentations of salesman
but who wants to project wearing a rag (unless it is the 'in' fashion)?
you cause me to ponder on some thoughts, lady!
10th Dec 2017 9:35am
Yes, safe in the box. It's difficult to connect with such, they have little of their own to contribute.
It is a lot to think about...and how we all have areas of safety we never relinquish.
It is a lot to think about...and how we all have areas of safety we never relinquish.
10th Dec 2017 4:23pm
i'm really digging that second stanza -
"Invariable, partitioned
false-front
postures...
stand shotgun
as if picket fence
facades
would deter wolves "
i feel this write is about people being fake,liars, putting up walls waiting for you to figure out they were fake, just like in the original dawn of the dead movie.
then the walls go tumbling
tumbling
trade me in for whatever your selling that day.
great write.
"Invariable, partitioned
false-front
postures...
stand shotgun
as if picket fence
facades
would deter wolves "
i feel this write is about people being fake,liars, putting up walls waiting for you to figure out they were fake, just like in the original dawn of the dead movie.
then the walls go tumbling
tumbling
trade me in for whatever your selling that day.
great write.
Anonymous
15th Dec 2017 9:33pm
AtoMik.. love the power of this.. raw honesty in your face.. love this verse..
Status quo
doughy showings
flow
Whitewashed wonderbread
vanilla memos
get yeasty
& overblown
So...
go update your status
with another pasty quote
simply brilliant.. much love, and respect..
Dave
Status quo
doughy showings
flow
Whitewashed wonderbread
vanilla memos
get yeasty
& overblown
So...
go update your status
with another pasty quote
simply brilliant.. much love, and respect..
Dave
15th Dec 2017 9:42pm
21st Dec 2017 5:06am
Wow this has an awesome rhyme scheme and creative metaphor. Great abstract muse, intense and impressive. U write in such a fine evocative style. Kudos.
21st Dec 2017 6:31am
