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Manifest - Collab w/ Diamond Dave
pure water
brightest blue
falling
raindrops
touching
harsh earth
rigid torn
nightmares
Unparching the farces
that cast drought
ditches
Stitches so stale
hitching
& hemming our
borderlines
surrender
to limitations
golden the
harvest denied
open arms
no doubt
fuck the fame
Eat an ego
& a steaming side
of prime cut pride
like fajita meat
Savor the tang
of flayed
inflated
pride
snagged in your fangs
A pirate chest
suppressed
& excavated
through wisdom
Manifest
simply
stewing
within
fever
We
Manifest
****
What a pleasure it was collabing with you dude! I think we did well!
brightest blue
falling
raindrops
touching
harsh earth
rigid torn
nightmares
Unparching the farces
that cast drought
ditches
Stitches so stale
hitching
& hemming our
borderlines
surrender
to limitations
golden the
harvest denied
open arms
no doubt
fuck the fame
Eat an ego
& a steaming side
of prime cut pride
like fajita meat
Savor the tang
of flayed
inflated
pride
snagged in your fangs
A pirate chest
suppressed
& excavated
through wisdom
Manifest
simply
stewing
within
fever
We
Manifest
****
What a pleasure it was collabing with you dude! I think we did well!
Published 10th Dec 2017
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Anonymous
10th Dec 2017 1:46am
AtoMik.. you are beyond talented.. i truly dig where this went.. thanks for giving the honor, to an old salty dog for the chance of collabing with you.. you've got wisdom and brilliant skills.. much respect to you..
Dave
Dave
10th Dec 2017 1:49am
It was my pleasure! You're well established here, and you've got a super unique style which I love :) It was nice working with another busy parent, I think our production speed was evenly matched.
10th Dec 2017 5:31am
Sorry, but don't have much interest in such collabs. No excuse. Just don't like 'dilution'. Only collab art i'm into is music, which to me is ultimate human collaborative Art........oh, well. Waddu aye know?
10th Dec 2017 6:36am
I think it's far from diluted, but I respect your opinion man :) I personally prefer most of my work to be individual pieces, but I also enjoy creating with other people, I find a lot of joy and fulfillment in doing so occasionally.
I'm also not a musician though...
I'm also not a musician though...
I really had no business saying anything about the piece. If i'd'a read it without 'knowing', i'd'a thought it was as excellent as anything else of yours I've read........it was a knuckleheaded basis for a critique----- I take it all back. And props to DD.
Y'r a gem, kid.
Y'r a gem, kid.
10th Dec 2017 5:33pm
10th Dec 2017 7:07am
Congratulations to the both of you... Atomik and Dave!
something to reread over (and over, upside down sometimes)
am awed really, so tuned the both of you that its harder for me to guess who write which part.
something to reread over (and over, upside down sometimes)
am awed really, so tuned the both of you that its harder for me to guess who write which part.
10th Dec 2017 7:54am
10th Dec 2017 8:36am
now, that was just wrong of me, bottoms up, no that's wrong too.. 😵 ill settle for reverse then 😂😂😂
10th Dec 2017 9:32am
10th Dec 2017 4:53pm
I really like the 5th and 6th stanzas in this piece
"open arms
no doubt
fuck the fame" -i feel like brushing off my shoulders like an asshole this line is so cool.
"Eat an ego
& a steaming side
of prime cut pride
like fajita meat
Savor the tang
of flayed
inflated
pride
snagged in your fangs " - my self-esteem was just eaten alive in a food challenge ....you just got a free meal on the house hahaha.
great collaboration guys.
Kudos to both of you.
"open arms
no doubt
fuck the fame" -i feel like brushing off my shoulders like an asshole this line is so cool.
"Eat an ego
& a steaming side
of prime cut pride
like fajita meat
Savor the tang
of flayed
inflated
pride
snagged in your fangs " - my self-esteem was just eaten alive in a food challenge ....you just got a free meal on the house hahaha.
great collaboration guys.
Kudos to both of you.
10th Dec 2017 5:36pm
Stoked that you liked It! :) We didn't differentiate between his lines and mine, but one of those is each of ours respectively, so that's cool!
12th Dec 2017 9:24pm
12th Dec 2017 9:51pm
