smile for me

My dear Crim, we all know this fight within even if we don’t want to admit it.
Tremendous write !

thank you dearest Ragnar for understanding I appreciate you my friend..

love Crim

"show me your darkness    
i'll show you mine"-  It starts off naughty yet sinister
i imagine a beautiful naked witch on a fur rug summoning a demon or two

you hear two people talking from the other room
but you just left and know only one person was in there...

"secretly with whispers" -maybe an incantation or two

"i only catch every other word    
but the intent is felt    
murderous backstabber    
i've fed well  "  - speeding through betrayal in my mind over and over again

"now it has mutiny in mind    
my steps shadowed    
as it crowds in   "-walking the plank of a pirate ship...maybe into a sand pit with teeth like in starwars

"pushes its will upon me    
with vicious greed"- teeth,snarling, intimidation  

"mimics the gods    
until i don't know    
what's real   "- false prophets  feeding off the crowds,until they crumble in their hands..dry  bread from the bakers dozen burnt


"my darkness  
feeds off my grief    
it grows in strength    
as inner turmoil & pain    
turns inside    
a tornado    
destroying all in its way   "- Akira the anime, when Tetsuo  grows as big as the city


"the dark it creeps    
has voice & life    
this demon    
has taken breath    
its steps are now mine  "- we all grow to become the demons we seek to destroy..what we do with the power defines us as people


"show me your darkness    
come close enough    
so i can see the evil    
that bleeds through your smile" - sit on my bed and talk with me awhile

https://zaroffpoetry.wordpress.com/2017/07/21/parallel/


John Martin's painting- Satan Presiding at the Infernal Council, c.1823–27


killer write Crim

dearest Samuel I love & adore your indepth critique highlighting how each stanza made you feel & the images that were brought to your mind.. I appreciate a good critique sadly I have to admit I have yet to develop that talent.. you thoughts are cherished.. your review shone light into a darkened morning.. thank you :)

love Crim

Amazing writing should never go unnoticed
breathe easy
for this morning you slayed poems like dragons at dusk

thank you dearest Samuel you are a beautiful soul & writer.. my morning is brighter for your presence :)

love Crim

Your poem always makes a transition with thoughts
A thought you can acknowledge without saying it's a thought
It's so nice and fluid, again, with elegance

Nice

Love
H

thank you beautiful H your gracious comment has me beaming :)

love Crim

thank you beautiful Daniella love your interpretation of this write & cherish your thoughts you gifted me smiles with your graciousness lovely one :)

love Brenda

Killer write crimson!

thank you most graciously Cosmo One :)

love Crim

Sounds so sinister...I'm quite unnerved lol...excellent darkness my dear Crim...

aw thank you Poe giggles :)

love Crim

That was completely amazing!! Loved every word of it!!

thank you dearest Ken I have wicked smile on my face from your comment :)

love Crim

A really chilling write, particularly those last lines.  I've got a backstabber of my own, sharpening his blade.  Just can't be rid of him it seems.  A truly fine write Lady Crim!

thank you my dearest Sir Crow for taking the ride with me..

love Crim

Crim, I don't want to go in the wasteland of eulogies or sycophantism, but so much you write I can relate to. So thank you. Rob x

thank you Rob for showing this write love
& for letting me know I'm not alone..

love Crim

   
show me your darkness  
come close enough  
so i can see the evil  
that bleeds through your smile  


This made me feel hope at the end. Well done.
 
 

thank you beautiful Jade
I'm happy the ending brought you hope..

love Crim

The title alone and reading you. Instant giddy evil laugh. Oh, your bringing out the dark of me my lovey.

giggles thank you Lady B you bring me so much joy :)

love Crim

Oh my love...your words can cause each of us to need a transfusion...it is there in us all, the darkness which lurks and grows but for every time it flourishes just a bit there is the counterbalance close behind...such a gift you have be able to tap into each kind of vein...loved this my beautiful girl...

I love you fiercely

yours always & forever
xoxoxox Taryn

thank you my love
for embracing my dark
with my light..

I love you passionately..

Brenda

You leave me pretty breathless every time Crim. To make even such darkness sound beautiful is pretty special <3

thank you dearest Sophie
for such a gracious compliment :)

love Crim

another excellent poem with the power to disturb :-))))) First Class write :-)))

Huge Hugs :-)))))))))

thank you dearest David
smiling wickedly from your comment :)

love & hugs..

Brenda

"that bleeds through your smile"...shazzam.. that fuckin' rocks!...you keep kicking words in the teeth and I keep coming back for more of the prize fight...too sexy...

forever in love
Jeff

than you dearest Jeff
I absolutely loved your comment
you gifted me smiles & blushes :)

love Crim

You have always been my Princess of darkness, Crim! This ink is proof of that! Xo

thank you beautfiul Rain
for such a lovely comment :)

love Crim

Whether you're speaking to your own inner demons or those hidden within others, this is a fantastic write! Show me your real, your truth, and I'll do the same, essentially. Love it, beautiful one! And I do so love you, my beautiful Dark Angel

thank you lovely one
for getting it & showing me love..

love you..

Crim

Love how you embrace your darkness ... it took me a long time to embrace mine. Sweet write my dear.

thank you beautiful Dragonfly
yes it takes time to realize
it is an important part of each of us..

love Crim

Slowly scrolling through your stuff, Crim, this was love at first sight. Sharp and sexy, dark and dangerous, it has all the elements necessary to keep me hooked. Brilliant!!

thank you graciously dearest David
for showing love for this one
it's one of my favorites :)

love Crim