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Release
Packed all my stuff up good
Like a little Girl Scout
More like a little Brownie
Young cadet with a duty
Eating all the many little munchies
All the sweet tum-yummies
Forgetting one day
This will all catch up with me
Whether I’m packing my bags or
Developing diabetes
It runs in the family
Already lost Aunt Sandy
But the fetters we ignore
Are the ones that win the wars
Contemplations misinformed
Self judgements passed
When at once we were born
Rebirth; the cycle of suffering
We journey along only seeking...
Relief; release.
The final ending.
Published 7th Nov 2017
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7th Nov 2017 3:57am
Yes, I remember it well...
I loved so many candy bars and sodas and various sweet treats. Now I substitute artificial sweeteners to trick instead of treat.
JJ
I loved so many candy bars and sodas and various sweet treats. Now I substitute artificial sweeteners to trick instead of treat.
JJ
7th Nov 2017 4:02am
This I know, I'm sorry JJ :(
We all do have our own sufferings and copings, for better or for worse. Stay strong my friend <3
We all do have our own sufferings and copings, for better or for worse. Stay strong my friend <3
7th Nov 2017 4:08am
beautiful Nightbird
feeling these words..
"When at once we were born
Rebirth; the cycle of suffering
We journey along only seeking...
Relief; release.
The final ending"
sigh seeking yes all of this..
powerful write dear one..
love Crim
feeling these words..
"When at once we were born
Rebirth; the cycle of suffering
We journey along only seeking...
Relief; release.
The final ending"
sigh seeking yes all of this..
powerful write dear one..
love Crim
7th Nov 2017 4:10am
7th Nov 2017 6:00am
Eating all the many little munchies
All the sweet tum-yummies
Forgetting one day
This will all catch up with me
Whether I’m packing my bags or
Developing diabetes "...
What a delightful read
Thanks for sharing this wonderful piece
Rose
All the sweet tum-yummies
Forgetting one day
This will all catch up with me
Whether I’m packing my bags or
Developing diabetes "...
What a delightful read
Thanks for sharing this wonderful piece
Rose
7th Nov 2017 3:02pm
7th Nov 2017 1:40pm
We feel so invincible when we're young. But in looking back . . . very few youth have the wisdom to heed the warning signs of age. I certainly wasn't one.
A thought provoking verse, Gem. Makes one look back in retrospect.
A thought provoking verse, Gem. Makes one look back in retrospect.
7th Nov 2017 3:06pm
Funny how these things can just come to sight all of sudden with age. Perhaps if the young were raised with better guidance... but then we do all ultimately make our own choices.
Thank you always for your thoughtful remarks Ahavati <3
Thank you always for your thoughtful remarks Ahavati <3
8th Nov 2017 3:07am
up to about 6/7 years ago I felt unbreakable - I think my mind has stayed quite young - the strength of youth is to be captured and held - but only the good bits (lol)
change should never be feared, it becomes what you make it :-)
Beautiful poem with lots of emotion :-)
Huge Big Hugs :-)))))))
change should never be feared, it becomes what you make it :-)
Beautiful poem with lots of emotion :-)
Huge Big Hugs :-)))))))
8th Nov 2017 12:49pm
Guess I was trying to capture just that- the strength of the young cadet to pack up her things and move on. While also acknowledging the naive or fickle nature of ignoring problems.
I agree change 'should' never be feared. For a catch-22... The only thing that is certain in life is that change is constant. Everything comes to an end eventually. It's up to us if we are going to embrace it or continue to make poor choices.
Weee Little Hugs :))
I agree change 'should' never be feared. For a catch-22... The only thing that is certain in life is that change is constant. Everything comes to an end eventually. It's up to us if we are going to embrace it or continue to make poor choices.
Weee Little Hugs :))
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