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inked in pain
you think i've reached my end?
i've just started to build
in momentum & strength
broken down to nothing
I begin again
in power & verse
I lay it out
for you to consume
twisted thoughts
spring from a wasteland
raw feelings
served up cold
bitter is the water
i'm tapping into now
the well contaminated
with self hate
it burns
behind my facade
I reach for beauty
she evades me
with a mirror to my soul
I witness one in peril
locked inside its blackness
I continue to push on
in spite of the darkness
reaching for the light
within my poetics
an acrobatic feat
to get past the madness
I need to free my being
touch the stars
where the depths of me
are well kept
deep in the cosmos
my true light shines
sad to say
so often i'm on disconnect
connecting with whatever
malevolent spirit
is convenient
so I close the book
inked in pain
& start a new one
Published 5th Nov 2017
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5th Nov 2017 5:41pm
Hopefully the next will be inked in at least some pleasure. You're a joy to read. My favorite lines:
sad to say so often
i'm on disconnect
connecting with whatever
malevolent spirit
is convenient
That's pretty much the story of my life at this point. I guess even this comment Is inked in pain. I'm just glad I found someone to share it with..
sad to say so often
i'm on disconnect
connecting with whatever
malevolent spirit
is convenient
That's pretty much the story of my life at this point. I guess even this comment Is inked in pain. I'm just glad I found someone to share it with..
5th Nov 2017 5:50pm
dearest poet yes beauty can be captured if we reach high enough.. I just couldn't find it in this write.. like you my pain was the only speaker present.. I cherish your thoughts & visits.. I hope today gets brighter for us both..
~Raven
~Raven
5th Nov 2017 8:51pm
Beautiful write! Even if angry at self, the will to transcend it dominates. The challenge will be hard, even impossible, but, if poets don't challenge impossibility, who will? Loved it!
5th Nov 2017 8:57pm
thank you dearest poet yes anger at self is the issue today.. though I know tomorrow is a new day to reach beauty within self.. I deeply cherish your insight & visit to my pages..
~Raven
~Raven
Anonymous
5th Nov 2017 11:18pm
so often i'm on disconnect
connecting with whatever
malevolent spirit
is convenient
This relates to me precisely. Tasty share. You're such an open poet. It's refreshing.
connecting with whatever
malevolent spirit
is convenient
This relates to me precisely. Tasty share. You're such an open poet. It's refreshing.
thank you graciously beautiful poetess for such a lovely comment.. I try to go with the flow of my internal muse even if it be scathing & unflattering to me.. in a way it slaps my face with the telling..I deeply appreciate your thoughts..
~Raven
~Raven
Anonymous
6th Nov 2017 5:27am
Damn it woman!
"""so I close the book
inked in pain
& start a new one"""
I felt like youve been eyeing me, lol
but seriously that passage alone pulled
cords and struck bells, til i trembled
i get you
<3
"""so I close the book
inked in pain
& start a new one"""
I felt like youve been eyeing me, lol
but seriously that passage alone pulled
cords and struck bells, til i trembled
i get you
<3
6th Nov 2017 5:33am
thank you beautiful poetess for feeling those lines so deeply.. I cherish your thoughts..
~Raven
~Raven
Anonymous
6th Nov 2017 6:15pm
Powerful and gorgeous lines here Raven...taking charge and control of anything on the outside trying to infiltrate in...I feel your space struggling also to come out from the darkness...
xoxo Taryn
xoxo Taryn
13th Nov 2017 8:59am
thank you dearest poetess
for the love on this write..
I will continue to struggle
& fight my way to the light..
~Raven
for the love on this write..
I will continue to struggle
& fight my way to the light..
~Raven
9th Nov 2017 00:42am
WOW! a fierce and powerful write - loved it, found it inspiring :-)
Excellent ink my friend :-))))))
Excellent ink my friend :-))))))
13th Nov 2017 9:00am
12th Nov 2017 4:58pm
My poetess friend, I see you...
"the well contaminated
with self hate
it burns
behind my facade "
deeply felt, I too hold self-hate :(
sometimes it's hard to break free
from this mentality..
"reaching for the light
within my poetics
an acrobatic feat
to get past the madness"
the rhyme & rhythm here just captured me!
your resilience is commendable
it might be a lifelong battle
but never give up the good fight :))
Sending much love your way...
"the well contaminated
with self hate
it burns
behind my facade "
deeply felt, I too hold self-hate :(
sometimes it's hard to break free
from this mentality..
"reaching for the light
within my poetics
an acrobatic feat
to get past the madness"
the rhyme & rhythm here just captured me!
your resilience is commendable
it might be a lifelong battle
but never give up the good fight :))
Sending much love your way...
13th Nov 2017 9:01am
thank you beautiful poetess for connecting with me on this write & for seeing me through the madness..
~Raven
~Raven
27th Jan 2018 10:25pm
The struggle between light and darkness is so powerful in this piece. Its' casual honesty, like this is just the way it is, sneaks in and surprises at the end. Beautiful write.
28th Jan 2018 9:14pm
