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dans sa nature
Sometimes I feel imagined, the way I drift along
in storybook abstract, seeking inspiration.
But you aren't here.
Maybe neither of us are.
My soldier; called to the front lines
to fight another battle
as I struggle to endure my own.
The war is long, but a heart
remembers the journey.
After the ash has settled and the sting of it
has left our eyes jaded and bodies weary,
I'll still be searching the trenches
for what I used to be.
It was never in your nature to tread
the path well travelled,
and you'll find me,
laying my broken stones
on the only one that leads us home.
"The two most powerful warriors are patience and time." - Leo Tolstoy
(Photo: Eric Keller)
in storybook abstract, seeking inspiration.
But you aren't here.
Maybe neither of us are.
My soldier; called to the front lines
to fight another battle
as I struggle to endure my own.
The war is long, but a heart
remembers the journey.
After the ash has settled and the sting of it
has left our eyes jaded and bodies weary,
I'll still be searching the trenches
for what I used to be.
It was never in your nature to tread
the path well travelled,
and you'll find me,
laying my broken stones
on the only one that leads us home.
"The two most powerful warriors are patience and time." - Leo Tolstoy
(Photo: Eric Keller)
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Re. dans sa nature
Anonymous
31st Oct 2017 6:12am
I’ll be searching the trenches
for what I used to be
Powerful
for what I used to be
Powerful
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Thanks for stopping in to read and comment, Arty, I really appreciate the visit and am glad you could enjoy...
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Anonymous
31st Oct 2017 7:50am
Breathtaking !
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1st Nov 2017 2:14pm
Re. dans sa nature
31st Oct 2017 10:07am
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1st Nov 2017 2:16pm
So very kind of you, Poet, it's always nice to see you on my pages. Thanks for the visit...
Re. dans sa nature
31st Oct 2017 5:43pm
these lines are wonderful...romantic metaphor in sweet verse...i love it-J
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1st Nov 2017 2:18pm
Glad to have made your list, J, and I thank you for the great comment as well. Glad you could enjoy...
Re. dans sa nature
2nd Nov 2017 5:52am
"and you'll find me,
laying my broken stones
on the only one that leads us home."
your soldier will find you lovely Kasai
this is a deeply felt poignant write
full of love & passion..
beautfiul..
love Crim
laying my broken stones
on the only one that leads us home."
your soldier will find you lovely Kasai
this is a deeply felt poignant write
full of love & passion..
beautfiul..
love Crim
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Re: Re. dans sa nature
2nd Nov 2017 8:59am
Thank you, talented one,
seeing your lovely words on my page
means alot and I always enjoy the visit...
seeing your lovely words on my page
means alot and I always enjoy the visit...
Re. dans sa nature
2nd Nov 2017 1:20pm
"sometimes I feel Imagined"
I absolutely love this line as I can relate.
Story of my life.
TY for sharing.
Nice pic BTW lol
I absolutely love this line as I can relate.
Story of my life.
TY for sharing.
Nice pic BTW lol
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Re: Re. dans sa nature
2nd Nov 2017 1:43pm
So glad you could find something relatable here
and I thank you for the great comment as well.
I appreciate the visit, Saximony...
and I thank you for the great comment as well.
I appreciate the visit, Saximony...
Re. dans sa nature
2nd Nov 2017 9:21pm
One can feel the melancholia in each powerful line K...a poem we can all find a little of in ourselves.
Cheers...Harry
Cheers...Harry
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3rd Nov 2017 3:37am
Thank you, Harry, glad you decded to stop in for a read.
Always nice to hear your thoughts...
Always nice to hear your thoughts...
Re. dans sa nature
3rd Nov 2017 2:59am
The first read is beautiful in words, the second read is beautiful in meaning. Love all of this even its sadness. RoseJasmine
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3rd Nov 2017 3:44am
You flatter me, RoseJasmine,
to know you've read twice is quite a compliment
and that you've added it to your collection, an even
bigger one.
Many thanks to you for a most lovely visit...
to know you've read twice is quite a compliment
and that you've added it to your collection, an even
bigger one.
Many thanks to you for a most lovely visit...
Re. dans sa nature
This is an exquisite write Kasai all-around from "Sometimes I feel imagined, the way I drift along" ...to... "The two most powerful warriors are patience and time. - Leo Tolstoy"
I feel your journey captured well here and can relate to the lingering emotion. Thank you for sharing, I am facing this as well. I hope you've since gathered the pieces of yourself, and that the trenches were not too treacherous <3
I feel your journey captured well here and can relate to the lingering emotion. Thank you for sharing, I am facing this as well. I hope you've since gathered the pieces of yourself, and that the trenches were not too treacherous <3
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5th Nov 2017 10:00pm
I have to thank you for such a beautiful comment
and I'm glad it spoke to you in your own journey.
Those trenches can be treacherous indeed, but as long as
we can still draw a breath, we will survive it.
There are still may pieces to gather; may we both find them along the way...
and I'm glad it spoke to you in your own journey.
Those trenches can be treacherous indeed, but as long as
we can still draw a breath, we will survive it.
There are still may pieces to gather; may we both find them along the way...