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Shards Of Glass
The sun sets on my heavy heart
failing to shine light on its
darkened embers.
Thoughts like daggers impale my soul
walking in the inbetween
feelings flooding in but I still feel disconnected.
Removed from life as it is
I seek to reveal my soul
through my writing.
It seems to show a mirror broken
glimmering shards reflecting
so many shades of light and dark
Making me wonder which is my true face?
Twisted and demented
light, shining bright
clashing sides
bind and choke
I feel so raw and exposed.
failing to shine light on its
darkened embers.
Thoughts like daggers impale my soul
walking in the inbetween
feelings flooding in but I still feel disconnected.
Removed from life as it is
I seek to reveal my soul
through my writing.
It seems to show a mirror broken
glimmering shards reflecting
so many shades of light and dark
Making me wonder which is my true face?
Twisted and demented
light, shining bright
clashing sides
bind and choke
I feel so raw and exposed.
Written by
crimsin
(Unveiling)
Published 15th Sep 2011
| Edited 16th Sep 2011
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Physical v. Spirtitual worlds
Anonymous
15th Sep 2011 10:54pm
The image of a shattered mirror/reflection is complex and satisfying. 'Thorns like daggers impale my soul' rankled a little (the physical cannot 'impale' the aethereal) - suggest 'thoughts like daggers/thorns impale my soul' and then the metaphor could be carried through to the shards of glass from the mirror? Just my two cents. Liked this. R>
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re: Physical v. Spirtitual worlds
16th Sep 2011 4:15am
thank you for the thoughtful comment..I took your advise and edited as I believed as well..it carried the concept I was trying to convey much better..ty again..peace Crim :)
interesting
15th Sep 2011 11:57pm
You know you give a very unique perspective in to the creative mind and it's struggles to understand the bombardment of thought verses information and how we come to grips with it, psychologically interesting.You friend are very deep.
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re: interesting
16th Sep 2011 4:17am
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Anonymous
16th Sep 2011 1:52am
Its always a pleasure to read your genius; methodical and in accordance with your thoughts and emotions. Well constructed my friend. Cheers!
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16th Sep 2011 4:19am
The enemy within
16th Sep 2011 6:28am
every piece of a broken mirror reflects some part of you worth seeing. sometimes seeing yourself is harder than seeing the enemy lurking in the mist.
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re: The enemy within
16th Sep 2011 6:45am
Bravo
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18th Sep 2011 8:36pm
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re: Bravo
18th Sep 2011 10:10pm
ty i'm glad you could connect with this piece..you made me smile with your comment..peace Crim
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12th Oct 2011 4:51am
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re: which is my true face?
14th Oct 2011 6:50pm