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gouache
she said
color me gouache
any day
i said
wish
i had the hands
to deal with the depth
of your shade:
ochre
for i now
understand
why
my blue
turns red
exposed
to you
as i have said before:
red is the color
i love
red is the color
i bleed
blood
that nature kept
blue
till it met
you
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Re: Re. gouache
24th Oct 2017 4:05pm
Re. gouache
24th Oct 2017 4:31pm
I really like the idea of this one. The reputation of the color red fits nicely and sets up a great last line. There does seem to be a odd break in the narrative in my opinion. It's starts with the girl wanting a gouache painting. This idea is lost and I feel it was a waisted opportunity not to add more water colors to the imagery along with images that of her request. Still a good piece I enjoyed it.
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Re: Re. gouache
24th Oct 2017 4:43pm
welcome
is the peer and
the insightful review.
the break
in the narrative, yes, odd, yes! kudos to the eye.
the story is of a girl, whose favorite color is ochre the deep red one. the painter is at a loss to depict that depth with what he can achieve. for she is beyond him.
and bleeds red, for her, 'cause of her.
welcome once again
to the deep-side community!
dear friend.
is the peer and
the insightful review.
the break
in the narrative, yes, odd, yes! kudos to the eye.
the story is of a girl, whose favorite color is ochre the deep red one. the painter is at a loss to depict that depth with what he can achieve. for she is beyond him.
and bleeds red, for her, 'cause of her.
welcome once again
to the deep-side community!
dear friend.
Re. gouache
24th Oct 2017 5:34pm
Some beauty, inner/outer beyond description, no words yet penned capable of the capture.
Deep write, my friend.
Much enjoyed, much appreciated.
Deep write, my friend.
Much enjoyed, much appreciated.
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Re: Re. gouache
deep
is the insight
the vision
of the Friend.
expression
was just
that- an expression
peers'
appreciation
is close to heart.
and
welcomed
with a smile.
always.
is the insight
the vision
of the Friend.
expression
was just
that- an expression
peers'
appreciation
is close to heart.
and
welcomed
with a smile.
always.
Re. gouache
24th Oct 2017 6:27pm
an utterly breathtaking write
the different shades of you & her
captured in a poem..
~Raven
the different shades of you & her
captured in a poem..
~Raven
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Re: Re. gouache
24th Oct 2017 6:30pm
breathtaking
is the sight
of the peers
and their
reviews.
welcome
are both
and
appreciated
immensely.
is the sight
of the peers
and their
reviews.
welcome
are both
and
appreciated
immensely.
Re: Re. gouache
Re. gouache
25th Oct 2017 5:51am
What a warm and profoundly emotional write, one of your best to date. Outstanding.
~anonshadow
~anonshadow
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Re. gouache
25th Oct 2017 5:51am
What a warm and profoundly emotional write, one of your best to date. Outstanding.
~anonshadow
~anonshadow
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Re: Re. gouache
welcome
is the peer
with the sight
and isnight.
also
welcome
is the peer's review.
all
appreciated
immensely.
is the peer
with the sight
and isnight.
also
welcome
is the peer's review.
all
appreciated
immensely.
Re. gouache
25th Oct 2017 1:05pm
Red dominates in the form and the content of your poem... And, that's reason enough for me to love it!
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Re: Re. gouache
25th Oct 2017 1:44pm
welcome
dear poet.
honor
is all mine.
appreciate
immensely
the visit
and the review.
dear poet.
honor
is all mine.
appreciate
immensely
the visit
and the review.
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Re: Re. gouache
6th Nov 2017 3:48am
welcome
is the peer
her depth of insight
and the glowing review.
words
can't express
the appreciation.
yes..we do try paint with our essence
stripped of ego, it's delusions.
profound is the review.
again..
is the peer
her depth of insight
and the glowing review.
words
can't express
the appreciation.
yes..we do try paint with our essence
stripped of ego, it's delusions.
profound is the review.
again..
Re. gouache
27th Oct 2017 12:02pm
Re: Re. gouache
Re. gouache
27th Oct 2017 12:22pm
Re: Re. gouache
27th Oct 2017 12:25pm
bro!
to hear that from you!
truly humbling.
reassuring!
no words
'nuff to Thank
You!
to hear that from you!
truly humbling.
reassuring!
no words
'nuff to Thank
You!
Re. gouache
23rd Mar 2022 5:28am
Damn this is one heavy vibe!! I had to google the word gouache just to get a firm understanding. I can definitely rock with this. Excellent spillage indeed
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