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Not Yet Dead in the Head
granny ain't trippin'
she ain't flippin'
mind ain't slippin'
jus tired o sittin'
she may drop some rhymes
this ain't about that
its about droppin' dimes
and takin' her street back
watchin' them fools
that ain't been schooled
out on her street
leavin' their stools
fools school
street stools
everybody playin' cool
yea
she may drop some rhymes
this ain't about that
it's about droppin' dimes
and takin' our streets back
she's tired of the dope
reached the end of her rope
seein' kids killin' kids
and nobody spoke
tired of it happenin'
bullets be crackin'
while all on yo minds
is bodies be slappin'
so git outta yo seats
and into the streets
this ain't about flow
it's about crack hoes
three yard vans
not bein' bland
jus bein' stupid
payin' the man
bland......man
stupid vans
bein' mired in quicksand
gang bangin'
fingers signin'
all a wreck
no respect
daddies dyin'
kids cryin'
mothers sobbin'
all this robbin'
dyin......cryin
sobbin......robbin
sittin' there, only heads bobbin'
needles stickin'
girls be trickin'
ODs quickenin'
all this sickenin'
if you might be thinkin'
this is all about race
it ain't about that
git outta her face
tho she's white
and not very bright
that ain't the gist
its about gettin' right
she's got grandsons
caramel hued lil' hons
doesn't even own a gun
jus tryin' to get it done
cause if you haven't noticed
we're all in this together
Author's note: If you had trouble gettin' into the flow of this, had to keep going back rereading and looking for it, then
GOOD!!
cuz that's what I fuckin' wanted.
***2nd note: If you don't think all this is extreme, then the title doesn't apply to you.
Published 22nd Oct 2017
| Edited 9th Apr 2018
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22nd Oct 2017 8:47pm
I don't even wanna imagine how to be in your shoes now Amorous_tryst.
But I agree, it takes a collective effort and more than just passive agression to end that war agains, drugs and guns. we all have to stand together, get out on street if needed just so we can make a change, for our children and grand children.
I am not American, but here is no different.
But I agree, it takes a collective effort and more than just passive agression to end that war agains, drugs and guns. we all have to stand together, get out on street if needed just so we can make a change, for our children and grand children.
I am not American, but here is no different.
22nd Oct 2017 9:14pm
Yes, I know it's no better where you live either, and if we all don't start doing our part, it'll only get worse.
Thanks for the visit and comment.
Thanks for the visit and comment.
Anonymous
22nd Oct 2017 9:41pm
Spittin crimes
Droppin dimes
Nana in verse
society's curse
callin' out sheople
time to make a stand
what came first
handle or the hand?
Droppin dimes
Nana in verse
society's curse
callin' out sheople
time to make a stand
what came first
handle or the hand?
Hey Arty, maybe we should've collab'd on this :-) Don't go readin' this again, I may steal your comment.
Much appreciated.
Much appreciated.
Anonymous
22nd Oct 2017 10:44pm
Stop collaborate and listen.....i aints no Milli Vanilla Ice Last time I collaborated on a poem, the line between changing and rearranging was misunderstood. I’m a lone wolf with a typewriter missing it's p's and q's.
22nd Oct 2017 11:00pm
damn it get down with your bad self :)
love the flow & vernacular of this write
with for real lines such as this..
"needles stickin'
girls trickin'
ODs quickenin'
all sickenin'
this is spectacular beautiful Teri..
love Crim
love the flow & vernacular of this write
with for real lines such as this..
"needles stickin'
girls trickin'
ODs quickenin'
all sickenin'
this is spectacular beautiful Teri..
love Crim
23rd Oct 2017 2:37am
Awww, My lovely Lady, so many thank yous for your words. Some times I get so frustrated reading and hearing about these problems and no real answers to the situation. I worry about not just my grandsons, but for all the children who will inherit this mess.
Your compliments and visit always appreciated.
Your compliments and visit always appreciated.
22nd Oct 2017 11:38pm
dead in the head is subjective - is the man who wants to Defend his family with a gun dead in the head or the guy that wants all guns banned - I am not going to answer that question (lol) but the description dead in the head has so many interpretations - I really liked and enjoyed your poem and think it would be great as a perfomance piece :-)
Excellent write :-) Hugs :-)
Excellent write :-) Hugs :-)
My thoughts when titling this was the apathy some seem to have as far as helping rid our streets of drugs and violence when all that needs to be done is "See something, say something". I know that's simplifying the fight, but you have to start somewhere. As far as performance.......stage fright here, but more than happy to let someone take and run with it as part of theirs.
Thanks David your perspective always welcomed by me.
Thanks David your perspective always welcomed by me.
23rd Oct 2017 3:08am
who cares if apathy rules (lol) it's not simplifying the fight I think it is exactly the fight - finding solutions is the pain in the ass, not that we shouldn't try :-)
23rd Oct 2017 1:46am
You know I created a character I call the Mass Worderer... this definitely makes me think of 'him'...gotta give u the props my dear, not just on the flow, but the depth of passionate outrage for this fucked up situation plaguing our future...
23rd Oct 2017 3:24am
Poe, you and I both know laying out the cause and effect of our current mess would be another War and Peace length write, yet most only think how to treat the symptoms rather than the disease. Welfare, food stamps, etc. are only band aids and cheap insurance to help us feel good about ourselves and maybe keep us out of harms ways and, that policy is going to lapse pretty soon if a real solution isn't found. Better stop here before this turns into that write.
You know the standard closing, and it's heart felt here.
You know the standard closing, and it's heart felt here.
23rd Oct 2017 10:38am
Anonymous
23rd Oct 2017 4:24am
you spit the truth that cracks the earth
right here...
and you are right..
it's gonna take a collective effort
to turn this tide..
right here...
and you are right..
it's gonna take a collective effort
to turn this tide..
23rd Oct 2017 5:16am
Couldn't agree more on the collective effort, but getting people off their ass and doing it is the real problem. Until it hits them personally, it's just another day in the life. We can't just sit and wait for some government agency to come to the rescue, sometimes the masses have to save themselves by taking an active roll in combating the problem. I feel you start by no longer turning a deaf ear and blind eye.
I thank Sir Naajir for his thoughts and insight voiced here.
I thank Sir Naajir for his thoughts and insight voiced here.
Anonymous
23rd Oct 2017 3:05pm
Well, hell, no problem at all following your flow here. And it just kept moving and throwing truth down left and right. Holy crap, mad respect for your pen and open eyes.
23rd Oct 2017 5:30pm
Thank you Ash, sometimes one is compelled to change the color of the ink to smack people awake and get them thinking.
I appreciate your visit and awesome words.
I appreciate your visit and awesome words.
24th Oct 2017 10:17am
true..only the dead
wouldn't notice
that
we're ALL in this together.
long time
since read
an ALIVE piece
as this.
this
to me
is poetry.
relevant.
alive.
big head? NO
big HEART? YES!
ink.
expression.
delivery.
wouldn't notice
that
we're ALL in this together.
long time
since read
an ALIVE piece
as this.
this
to me
is poetry.
relevant.
alive.
big head? NO
big HEART? YES!
ink.
expression.
delivery.
There comes a time in life when circumstance dictates action. We have reached that point yet again, though in reality we've not left it in 200 years. You hear people say they'd protect their children with their life. Maybe these problems wouldn't necessitate anything that extreme, so, why not protect them by speaking up when the opportunity is there, taking a stand in your own neighborhood or community. All it takes is for one to become two, then a group, and that group becomes a crowd. We've all seen what a crowd is capable of, only this crowd will be here to reclaim what belongs to them, to build up instead of tear down. Simplified??, yes, the devil is always in the details, so, lets work out the details together. They say, "what have you got to lose?".....in this case everything!
Thanks for the visit as always CF, your pen is always a welcomed sight.
Thanks for the visit as always CF, your pen is always a welcomed sight.
24th Oct 2017 5:10pm
Hah! It actually played out like a cool rap in my head. There's a pretty good flow going on there. Cool message, too.
24th Oct 2017 5:24pm
Thanks Xhrinic, read some of your writes last night, you ain't bad at spittin' out words your own self. Always a parking lot for visits and comments here.
