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sunbaby*
Sun bounces on the forgotten ocean
Moon slides over remembering grass
The promised land trips into my mind
Soon the first thoughts will never last...
A crooked stream never pulls itself straight
The winded cave sound in my head
A pot of emotional luck with logic stirring
Makes a soup too hot to taste instead...
A release to the internally cosmos
As the soul expanding across into one
Flying high over the clouded view point
With a compass and vision still unspun...
Point the way, my magnetic seer
The love I seek lives on a distant Aether
Vibrate the message for the spine to tune in
A circling dream, we will turn in the end...
Red bloom on a spiraling comet
I reached and plucked in it's passing
This flower of her memory in my heart
Still grows there everlasting...
Moon slides over remembering grass
The promised land trips into my mind
Soon the first thoughts will never last...
A crooked stream never pulls itself straight
The winded cave sound in my head
A pot of emotional luck with logic stirring
Makes a soup too hot to taste instead...
A release to the internally cosmos
As the soul expanding across into one
Flying high over the clouded view point
With a compass and vision still unspun...
Point the way, my magnetic seer
The love I seek lives on a distant Aether
Vibrate the message for the spine to tune in
A circling dream, we will turn in the end...
Red bloom on a spiraling comet
I reached and plucked in it's passing
This flower of her memory in my heart
Still grows there everlasting...
Written by
runaway-mindtrain
Published 18th Oct 2017
| Edited 11th Feb 2018
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Re. sunbaby*
18th Oct 2017 8:46am
Very nice poem Jeff. I feel it's a bit different form the others of yours. Softer and gentler....Glad to read it.
RoseJasmine
RoseJasmine
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Re: Re. sunbaby*
18th Oct 2017 12:45pm
big hug Jasmine...so supportive...I really glad you flowed gently through the lines...it was the plan...
Re. sunbaby*
Anonymous
18th Oct 2017 10:52am
Beautiful imagery :-)
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18th Oct 2017 12:42pm
thank you very much.. my star friend...so many here, have such ability to see...
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Anonymous
18th Oct 2017 12:44pm
It is also amazing that people like yourself can help us create such imagery, so thank you!
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Re. sunbaby*
18th Oct 2017 1:18pm
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18th Oct 2017 8:32pm
yes you are yoga bab(y)...you shine a warm light on my work...big hug sweetheart-J
Re. sunbaby*
18th Oct 2017 8:36pm
"Red bloom on a spiraling comet
I reached and plucked in it's passing
This flower of her memory in my heart
Still grows there everlasting... "
this is utterly breathtaking & clearly inspired by a divine love..
love Crimsin
I reached and plucked in it's passing
This flower of her memory in my heart
Still grows there everlasting... "
this is utterly breathtaking & clearly inspired by a divine love..
love Crimsin
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Re: Re. sunbaby*
18th Oct 2017 8:57pm
much love to you, crimsin...your return warms my heart ..perhaps we are all part of a divine love....thank you so much-J
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Anonymous
19th Oct 2017 8:52am
So lovely and soothing.
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19th Oct 2017 2:13pm
Re. sunbaby*
19th Oct 2017 2:34pm
Such a delicate flow of tender feelings !
How wonderful... to be the recipient of mutual affections, for better or worst ~ 🎈🌞🌷😎
How wonderful... to be the recipient of mutual affections, for better or worst ~ 🎈🌞🌷😎
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Re: Re. sunbaby*
20th Oct 2017 3:57am
Gracious shadow...I had never thought of my lines that way...nice to know the effect can happen...such response inspires me to write more ...thank you..-J
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Anonymous
19th Oct 2017 7:34pm
oh my orphaned heavens!!!
WoW, this amazing, you are such an exotic man/poet.
always in awe of your inlets
WoW, this amazing, you are such an exotic man/poet.
always in awe of your inlets
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20th Oct 2017 4:02am
splitsunsets you rock the punctuation...and it makes my heart soar.... so we shall sail inlet some more...thank you my lovely friend-J
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Anonymous
22nd Oct 2017 8:33pm
;)
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Anonymous
24th Oct 2017 2:09am
gorgeous poetry...yes...i loved this write...read smooth as silk and wrapped me within the same...take a bow!
"Point the way, my magnetic seer
The love I seek lives on a distant Aether
Vibrate the message for the spine to tune in
A circling dream, we will turn in the end... "
~ beautiful...
xoxo Taryn
"Point the way, my magnetic seer
The love I seek lives on a distant Aether
Vibrate the message for the spine to tune in
A circling dream, we will turn in the end... "
~ beautiful...
xoxo Taryn
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thank you, Taryn goddess of words...such support inspires more ...so glad I could wrap you in words-J
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Anonymous
14th Nov 2017 4:58pm
A different feeling from you, but evokes such beautiful imagery
Red bloom on a spiraling comet
I reached and plucked in it's passing
This flower of her memory in my heart
Still grows there everlasting.
Red bloom on a spiraling comet
I reached and plucked in it's passing
This flower of her memory in my heart
Still grows there everlasting.
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Re. sunbaby*
26th Nov 2017 10:49pm
i felt only the last two stanzas hinted at romance. i like some of your descriptions of nature.
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26th Nov 2017 11:06pm
Re. sunbaby*
28th Feb 2018 8:58pm
wow! it's fascinating how far you can go with your imagination. This is a pretty awesome piece of work.
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1st Mar 2018 3:53am