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the dust
keeps falling
here we go again
there is no answer
to the why
it
just
does
there
i lay
once unobstructed
to
the sky
till
the dust
came
and kept
adding layers
once
in a long while
it does rain
why?
do not ask
the answer lay
inside
the dust
covered
book
here we go again
there is no answer
to the why
it
just
does
there
i lay
once unobstructed
to
the sky
till
the dust
came
and kept
adding layers
once
in a long while
it does rain
why?
do not ask
the answer lay
inside
the dust
covered
book
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Re. the dust
10th Oct 2017 5:27pm
we need but to dust it off
as the magic inside
comes alive & is new once more..
wonderful write..
love Crim
as the magic inside
comes alive & is new once more..
wonderful write..
love Crim
1
Re: Re. the dust
10th Oct 2017 5:32pm
true.
be it
of time
on relation(ships)
or hearts
or books/affirmations
welcome
is the peer
with the wisdom
and insight
reflected in the review.
both appreciated
deeply.
be it
of time
on relation(ships)
or hearts
or books/affirmations
welcome
is the peer
with the wisdom
and insight
reflected in the review.
both appreciated
deeply.
Re. the dust
11th Oct 2017 10:22am
I love the
melancholy
feel in this,
yet,
it's not a
sad poem
just
the feeling
I love it when a poem confuses me
beautiful!
melancholy
feel in this,
yet,
it's not a
sad poem
just
the feeling
I love it when a poem confuses me
beautiful!
1
Re: Re. the dust
11th Oct 2017 1:38pm
welcome
is the poet
the peer
the in-depth insight.
the last stanza
is but a maze
apologies
but
it demanded to be kept
that way
peer
the review
appreciated
deeply.
is the poet
the peer
the in-depth insight.
the last stanza
is but a maze
apologies
but
it demanded to be kept
that way
peer
the review
appreciated
deeply.
Re. the dust
11th Oct 2017 5:21pm
Whew!, so relieved dejure gave me an out on this one. I waited until someone possibly would, for I had no clue what the last stanza was referring to. But, like the comment, I liked the rest of it.
OK, the brain must now go waste time on mundane matters.
Thanks CF for the intermission.
OK, the brain must now go waste time on mundane matters.
Thanks CF for the intermission.
1
Re: Re. the dust
apologies
for the incomprehensible
ultimate stanza
"the answer lay
inside
the dust
covered
book "
the line breaks
if not present won't
convey the multiple stories
the stories of dust
the general one
that falls on things
obscuring the relations that exists
'tween the objects and their surrounds
[what follows is obvious..the issues]
when halted after the first three lines -
"the answer lay
inside
the dust "
..the dust itself
where it originates
why and what it does
obviously origin is the dust itself losing the bond
of the material it belonged to
and the cause internal and/or external
"the answer lay
inside
the dust
covered"
this is another story
if read in one sentence
the answer lay inside the dust, covered.
here the 'inside' depicts -covered beneath thick layers of dust. the extent of time that it continued..
"the answer lay
inside
the dust
covered
book"
here
when read till the last line
it is pretty much self explanatory
the dust covered book- the story of the story obscured by the dust of time.
the peer
the Friend.
are welcomed
open arms.
the review
is but an honor.
held deep
close.
for the incomprehensible
ultimate stanza
"the answer lay
inside
the dust
covered
book "
the line breaks
if not present won't
convey the multiple stories
the stories of dust
the general one
that falls on things
obscuring the relations that exists
'tween the objects and their surrounds
[what follows is obvious..the issues]
when halted after the first three lines -
"the answer lay
inside
the dust "
..the dust itself
where it originates
why and what it does
obviously origin is the dust itself losing the bond
of the material it belonged to
and the cause internal and/or external
"the answer lay
inside
the dust
covered"
this is another story
if read in one sentence
the answer lay inside the dust, covered.
here the 'inside' depicts -covered beneath thick layers of dust. the extent of time that it continued..
"the answer lay
inside
the dust
covered
book"
here
when read till the last line
it is pretty much self explanatory
the dust covered book- the story of the story obscured by the dust of time.
the peer
the Friend.
are welcomed
open arms.
the review
is but an honor.
held deep
close.
Re. the dust
13th Oct 2017 10:49am
Lovely imagery here! I see sparse rays of light slicing through dust-choked air to illuminate an old book on a lone table.
Simple, but impacting <3
Simple, but impacting <3
1
Re: Re. the dust
13th Oct 2017 1:16pm
welcome
is the peer
with a beautiful
insight.
Peer
review
both
appreciated
deeply.
is the peer
with a beautiful
insight.
Peer
review
both
appreciated
deeply.