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rejects
hallowed be my shame
in the halls of my grief
i am but a leper cast out
as i die a little more inside
my insanity grows
different faces for each new day
& i hide in the barren lands
my voice is tainted
it comes from a place of pain
it slices me
serves up the bitter truth raw
no place to hide
from the pen's reflection
there are no filters
no masks
a soul slipping sideways
is revealed
grim is the way
of my wandering
off the path
into the dark
where the desolate walk
each clawing
at their fellow fallen
with no direction
& no way back
we stare at each other in horror
for what remains
even the devil wouldn't take
Copyright © 2017 Crimsin. All Rights Reserved
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crimsin
(Unveiling)
Published 20th Sep 2017
| Edited 21st Sep 2017
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Re. rejects
20th Sep 2017 10:33pm
Outstanding exposure in verse Crim!!! The depths of self-deprecation run deep in this work of introspection. Seeing your reflection in verse means you can see the things you want to change. The only thing that needs rejecting are the parts you want to shed from your soul. The less travelled path reveals your uniqueness. Embrace that and rid yourself of the things the fellow fallen on their desolate road are too busy embracing to be free of their own rejection. Embrace yourself and others will follow. It's never too late...
JJ
JJ
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Re: Re. rejects
21st Sep 2017 6:25pm
thank you dearest JJ for a very thougtful comment full of insigh & wisdom.. you see so clearly what I don't while lost in the dark.. your advise is like a beacon of light.. love Brenda
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21st Sep 2017 6:25pm
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20th Sep 2017 11:43pm
I envy you, Lady Crim. Yes, I know envy is a sin but aren't we all sinners? Your mastery of wordcraft is top-notch!
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Re: Re. rejects
21st Sep 2017 6:23pm
my Darkest Lord you humble & honor me greatly thank you my dear friend.. love Crim
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Anonymous
21st Sep 2017 00:38am
my love....those last two stanzas....good gods...but the imagery seen throughout this read is haunting and achingly wonderful....such a quill you have My Beautiful Brenda...
I love you madly, deeply
yours always & forever
xoxoxox Taryn
I love you madly, deeply
yours always & forever
xoxoxox Taryn
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Re: Re. rejects
21st Sep 2017 6:27pm
thank you my love I know this write is quite desolate just a bit of sadness yesterday.. I love you thoughts & cherish them.. I love you passionately.. Brenda
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Anonymous
21st Sep 2017 2:33am
The shadows and textures of our selves can be haunting, but they are beautiful as well. Paths lead off into darkness but we carry our lights inside. And the shadows cannot snuff that glow. This is a raw look of introspection, my beautiful Dark Angel. You are your light and when you forget, we are here holding your hand. I do so love you
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Re: Re. rejects
21st Sep 2017 6:28pm
thank you lovely one yes beauty can be seen even in the shadows I deeply appreciate you reminding me of that.. I love you.. Crim
Re. rejects
21st Sep 2017 12:54pm
"For what remains, even the Devil wouldn't
take..." that's a horrible visual reality...exceptional, dark inking....
take..." that's a horrible visual reality...exceptional, dark inking....
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21st Sep 2017 6:28pm
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Anonymous
21st Sep 2017 12:57pm
Genuinely....I don't even know how to comment on this......efffing hell.
All i'm going to say is that there is NO PART that I don't adore.
I need to smoke.
Ben xxxx
All i'm going to say is that there is NO PART that I don't adore.
I need to smoke.
Ben xxxx
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Re: Re. rejects
21st Sep 2017 6:29pm
thank you dearest Ben for a truly beautiful comment on this dark & somber write.. love Brenda
Re. rejects
21st Sep 2017 7:09pm
"Grim is the way" but this is an outstanding write Lady Crim. I take it from the last stanza that we're all in this together, giving the devil his due. Very unsettling but excellent, eloquent work.
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28th Sep 2017 2:35pm
Re. rejects
21st Sep 2017 8:29pm
To me it is a deep irony that here we have one of the best poets here questioning their muse or lack there of. and even with you must taking a short holiday you can still write such a strong relatable poem - You've got it in spades :-)
Big mammoth Hugs :-)
Big mammoth Hugs :-)
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28th Sep 2017 2:36pm
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Anonymous
23rd Sep 2017 1:23am
Brenda.. the goddess of poetry.. truly love your work.. and love you my sister..
Dave
Dave
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28th Sep 2017 2:37pm
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28th Sep 2017 11:10am
brenda, this gave me shivers
such a chilling train of thought
you are the mistress of dark poetry
xo
love you heaps
such a chilling train of thought
you are the mistress of dark poetry
xo
love you heaps
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Re: Re. rejects
28th Sep 2017 2:34pm
thank you beautiful one for feeling this write you are so gracious to me I am humbled.. love you lady.. Brenda
Re. rejects
19th Dec 2017 1:26am
Square pegs don't fit in round holes! Pieces unique without any use, for now! Eventually I believe it will all come together.
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19th Dec 2017 1:29am