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Clique
Each irate iris fastened onto you
Unshaken spiteful splinters prod
The unstrained
(Unrestrained)
Unfiltered assessments
Sans any applauding nods
Their charter to tolerate lapsed
Now
Extending they stick out snide shins
To trip you on your back
Eyes bore (though truly, they're bored)
Not to break your skin
No...
Thirsting and seething
Hungry in hopes
Believing you'll loathe such you're encased in
Wretched and roaming
Sheathing claws hostile
And honed
They viciously vouch
(Blaming)
Claiming...
You've torn yourself with nails of your own
Unshaken spiteful splinters prod
The unstrained
(Unrestrained)
Unfiltered assessments
Sans any applauding nods
Their charter to tolerate lapsed
Now
Extending they stick out snide shins
To trip you on your back
Eyes bore (though truly, they're bored)
Not to break your skin
No...
Thirsting and seething
Hungry in hopes
Believing you'll loathe such you're encased in
Wretched and roaming
Sheathing claws hostile
And honed
They viciously vouch
(Blaming)
Claiming...
You've torn yourself with nails of your own
Published 16th Aug 2017
| Edited 18th Aug 2017
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16th Aug 2017 7:32am
some kind of a backstory to this, I figure,
but I imagine Narcissus admiring his reflection...
but I imagine Narcissus admiring his reflection...
16th Aug 2017 7:47am
Yes, a collective Narcissus, or narcissistic social organism :( Deadly to the kind and well-intented. We all know at least one...
16th Aug 2017 1:23pm
Your reply to Feddeler touches base in my thoughts. Insecurity in a se(ething)a ocean of jealousy; keeping their eyes on others so they won't have to look at themselves.
18th Aug 2017 6:44am
Your last line sums up why bullying can be so insidious: the target believes or comes to believe the negative things that are focused on them.
Claiming you've tore yourself with nails of your own — I suggest you use "you've torn yourself" or "you tore yourself".
Claiming you've tore yourself with nails of your own — I suggest you use "you've torn yourself" or "you tore yourself".
18th Aug 2017 10:29am
Yes, you're right, that would make better sense :) I'll edit it. Thank you for the kind comments. It's quite insidious, I've tried few ventures into poetry for relating living in the wake of emotional abuse. It's difficult to portray the mindfucking as accurately as I'd like. It's always cathartic though at least. I hope that the readers can't relate, but fear that it's common enough to be nearly impossible not to (if that makes sense).
18th Aug 2017 10:59am
Yes, it makes sense. I'm not sure how well we can fully express the entire scope of emotion that those experiences bring. It is enough to share it in pieces, to capture moments, to make it speak as best you can. When it comes to challenging things like abuse, there can be both sadness and comfort when others find your writing relatable.
