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looking though
Looking though these bars
of your own disine
wishfull thinking
your only crime
with sadness
are these steps you take
through the ruins
of your past mistakes
a skeletal grasp
your only line
away from the chaos
of your paraniod mind
of your own disine
wishfull thinking
your only crime
with sadness
are these steps you take
through the ruins
of your past mistakes
a skeletal grasp
your only line
away from the chaos
of your paraniod mind
Published 5th Sep 2011
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7th Sep 2011 00:13am
i like the length and depth your poems provide. Im a fan myself, of short poetry. There are some typos in the poem:
1.though as in through
2.disine as in design (?)
3. paraniod as in paranoid
1.though as in through
2.disine as in design (?)
3. paraniod as in paranoid
7th Sep 2011 5:25pm
20th Dec 2021 12:02pm
Dear William
i like how your Avatar
has the feel of a movie poster
and each poem one of the 500 cinematic scenes
silent lotus
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i like how your Avatar
has the feel of a movie poster
and each poem one of the 500 cinematic scenes
silent lotus
`
23rd Dec 2021 11:43am
