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Of Course I Love You
My breathing becomes heavier
My head unusually tilts
I flit between mild shaking,
Fidgeting and being stalk still
My feet uncomfortably shuffle
Previously I drowned you with
Information and repeated myself
Furtively I cover my mouth or
Other areas felt as vulnerable
I’ve started to blink my eyes
I’m perspiring more than usual
I feel like I might be stuttering
Our conversation is strained
We are on the cusp of arguing
We both fear being caught in a lie
“I would never lie to you, honest.”
‘I am only acting this way
Because I know you’re going
To ask me,’
“Do you still love me.”
And I am going to answer
“Yes, of course I do.”
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Re. Of Course I Love You
Anonymous
28th Jul 2017 2:56am
I know this all too well and I was getting more and more tense with the reading of each line...to this I say "eeeesh"....for how much I feel it, well done!
xoxo Taryn
xoxo Taryn
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Re: Re. Of Course I Love You
28th Jul 2017 4:56pm
people lie, right to your face - I still find that bewildering thank you I am glad you got it :-)
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Anonymous
28th Jul 2017 4:12am
I know it as well.
Good stuff man
Good stuff man
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Re: Re. Of Course I Love You
28th Jul 2017 4:57pm
Re. Of Course I Love You
Anonymous
28th Jul 2017 4:33am
Hey David........always greatness from you........this hit me deeply.......yep yep......been here a few times........purple luv & hugs xo :)
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28th Jul 2017 4:58pm
my loss of faith in humanity is heightened by lies and liars :-( thank you for your appreciation :-) hugs :-)
Re. Of Course I Love You
28th Jul 2017 12:02pm
Cross my heart and hope to die! I love the flip on this one, David. I thought it was a new couple, but it turns out it's a seasoned one.
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Re: Re. Of Course I Love You
28th Jul 2017 5:00pm
time can breed lies, not sure why that would be the case :-( I'm glad you enjoyed it :-)
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28th Jul 2017 5:36pm
Re. Of Course I Love You
28th Jul 2017 1:21pm
This is a great piece of writing and you didn't murder anyone in it ....
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Re: Re. Of Course I Love You
28th Jul 2017 5:01pm
only because I stopped writing when I did or there would have been murder for sure (lol) I am glad you liked it :-)
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Anonymous
28th Jul 2017 2:06pm
Man, this one had my chest tightening and my eyes scanning for an exit. You built up the emotional tension perfectly in this one, David.
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Re: Re. Of Course I Love You
28th Jul 2017 5:03pm
thank you so much. It's positive comments like this that keeps me going :-) Big Hugs :-)
Re. Of Course I Love You
28th Jul 2017 3:12pm
So caught up in the intensity of the moment--breath-held anticipation of the inevitable, expected response..and then exhaling in relief...with your-- 'I-really-did-not-see-that-happening'-- conclusion......
David..within this piece, the discomfort is palpable--so skillfully, and sensitively scribed! ( your ability to express deep feelings/responses, is remarkable...one of the numerous reasons, that draws me to your poetry. And this is another outstanding example of this awesome ability)
David..within this piece, the discomfort is palpable--so skillfully, and sensitively scribed! ( your ability to express deep feelings/responses, is remarkable...one of the numerous reasons, that draws me to your poetry. And this is another outstanding example of this awesome ability)
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Re: Re. Of Course I Love You
28th Jul 2017 5:05pm
you are too kind, but boy does this comment make writing worthwhile - thank you my friend :-)
Re. Of Course I Love You
28th Jul 2017 6:38pm
Re: Re. Of Course I Love You
28th Jul 2017 8:05pm
Hey Jackie I have sorely missed you and your poetry - nice to see you back - hope you are back :-)
Re: Re. Of Course I Love You
7th Aug 2017 2:54am
Yeah not really but thanks it's nice to know I'm Missed 🌹 Soon though Autums on its way and the holidays are coming. I am most vocal t that time 🤗 Loves ya ❤️ Jackie xo
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