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I exhale & a nebula is born
you hide yourself in the breath
of my creation
cover yourself
with celestial clouds
so that even my mind
is unsure of your true visage
you shift & the ground beneath me
becomes unsteady
you're a creature handmade
by the gods themselves
chiseled in stone
is your resolve
I melt away
when faced with your logic
my heart is like a meteor hurdling
to the Earth
destined to burn
deep is my lust
within this mortal woman
lies an immortal love
I knew you once
drank from your divine cup
& you knew me
now we are just two stars
that shine in the same sky
who taste each other
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though I fail to reach you
with plastic words
hollow echos
in your ears
you hear me call
know my voice
but no longer
recognize my face
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Anonymous
18th Jun 2017 2:35pm
the craft....continues in good hands
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18th Jun 2017 9:00pm
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18th Jun 2017 9:01pm
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18th Jun 2017 3:23pm
i think my shrivelled heart just curled up & died.
this has left me verklempt, beautiful one...
... loving a poet is not for the weak. been there, too smart to go there again.
love you, lady
xo
p.s he's a right spunk trumpet if he doesn't know you're a fucking supernova. ijs.
this has left me verklempt, beautiful one...
... loving a poet is not for the weak. been there, too smart to go there again.
love you, lady
xo
p.s he's a right spunk trumpet if he doesn't know you're a fucking supernova. ijs.
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18th Jun 2017 9:03pm
thank you beautiful one yes it hurts when you fall for the man behind the words.. p.s. I looked up verklempt but I couldn't get the translation for it.. I absolutely loved your comparing to a supernova gave me smiles :) love you lady.. xo Brenda
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Anonymous
18th Jun 2017 3:36pm
Wow! Just wow!! Amazing
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18th Jun 2017 9:04pm
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18th Jun 2017 3:54pm
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18th Jun 2017 9:05pm
thank you Poet for feeling this I know your waters run deep.. love you.. xx Brenda
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18th Jun 2017 5:44pm
"chiseled in stone
is your resolve
I melt away
when faced with your logic"
^^^^^^^^ Damn Crim! That right'thurrr, was insanely beautiful! Entire poem was on point! ❣
is your resolve
I melt away
when faced with your logic"
^^^^^^^^ Damn Crim! That right'thurrr, was insanely beautiful! Entire poem was on point! ❣
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18th Jun 2017 9:06pm
thank you lovely Rain for a most gracious comment that brought me smiles :) love Brenda
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18th Jun 2017 6:10pm
'stars in the sky', if we could ever achieve that;
it's an event horizon, Crim...
it's an event horizon, Crim...
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18th Jun 2017 9:07pm
thank you John we I believe we are but pale copies of what we truly are while traveling the mortal realm.. love Crim
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Anonymous
18th Jun 2017 8:11pm
Yes M'am!!
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18th Jun 2017 9:08pm
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Anonymous
19th Jun 2017 00:59am
My Beautiful Brenda, just as a poet has captured you, there are many just as captured by you my love...isn't that something to think about...how powerful your own words can be to another...remember that always lovely one...
I love you deeply
With all my love - Taryn xoxo
I love you deeply
With all my love - Taryn xoxo
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19th Jun 2017 1:03am
thank you my love you are full of such wisdom I had not thought of it in those terms.. I'm afraid they find me to be fools gold.. it only glitters in the sun..
I love you passionately..
xo Brenda
I love you passionately..
xo Brenda
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Anonymous
19th Jun 2017 1:55pm
I come across a poem every once in a while that captures me into its being so completely that I forget to breathe. This was just one such poem. So beautifully it moved through my mind reading it. My lovely Angel, this is divine writing. So much love...
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20th Jun 2017 1:55am
thank you lovely one a greater compliment I couldn't hope to receive.. I cherish you thoughts beautiful lady.. love you.. xo Crim
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20th Jun 2017 5:31pm
words have power, more than sticks and stones - I sometimes find myself beautifully imprisoned in your words
amazing write :-)
amazing write :-)
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22nd Jun 2017 4:59pm
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21st Jun 2017 6:23am
"you hear me call
know my voice
but no longer
recognize my face"
fav lines.
Deliciously painful ink.
Enioyed
know my voice
but no longer
recognize my face"
fav lines.
Deliciously painful ink.
Enioyed
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22nd Jun 2017 4:52pm
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Anonymous
24th Jun 2017 3:38am
Brenda... i'd follow you anywhere... your brilliance is one of a kind... love you..
Dave
Dave
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