Acrimony, Check

That's a fucking amazing reaction. Thank you!    

I wasn't sure which category it best fit. It doesn't seem angry enough for anger, dark enough for dark, and has more sexual content than felt right for miscellaneous. Which category would you submit it under?

I wouldn't have, based on your comment, but I understand wanting to make it clear. Thanks. :-)

It's not love,  erotic is the right place
if you want people to read it, go erotic

Great poem

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Love is the least appropriate category for this one. :-) Thank you for the comment and for the reading list addition. I'm glad you liked it.

I agree erotic is the best category!  

First, I loved the title. It captures the reader's attention right off the bat.  

Your opening two lines were fantastic. Drew the reader right into the scenario.  The use of "fucked" and "braced" added an element of ferocity, a feral desire.  

The double-entendre of "distorted" in the second stanza is both literal and metaphorical of the situation. The assonance of rejected and reflection rolls off the tongue into the consonance of "n", both ending the line into the next.  

Twisted / distorted, by / brand / passion - great consonance of the 't' & 's' & assonance of the 'o'. adding a lyrical feel to the entire line.

I wondered if you needed "and" in the third stanza, so re-read a few times. It's one of those lines that work with or without.

The first line of that fourth stanza is phonetically excellent!

The use of "delivered" and the spacing emphasizing the meaning was excellent.  

That final stanza wraps up the 'package' nicely and adds an element of surprise by a twisted relation of sorts!  

Well done!

Thank you, once more, for the depth of your critique. There's a little thrill in discovering that something I've given thought to is noticed, and effective, as well as having something revealed to me in my own work that wasn't in the conscious part of my mind when writing.    
 
That "and" you mentioned has come and gone a few times. Currently, I like the way it reads with it just a little more, but one day It may go again. Funny how those little words can make the wheels turn.

'fucked', 'parking lots' and 'cum', when replaced with non contemporary would make this a timeless piece.  

Finding the era it was written would be all the more toilsome.

 cold, and fusion, i find both in this.

"Parking lots" and "cum" may be contemporary, but "fucked" has been around for a very, very long time. :-) Thanks for the comment. :-)

what     the    fuck..

i love this, it was honestly painful and gut twisting  


and all that Vati said too

That is a high compliment, thank you!

Wow ... such honesty ... vulnerability ... aching write my dear poetess ... takes me back ... being the other woman .. love the short lines ... crisp line breaks ... my fav ...

Thank you so much for reading and for letting me know that you like it. It was a different sort of relationship, and I did my best to take it down to its bones.

Your comments are gold, seriously. Thanks for taking the time to look this one up and give it a read. It's one of the few times that I felt like I really got what I wanted on the page. Honored that you've added it to your reading list.