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fields of gold
...of golden hues
atop magenta fields
with back to the stem
of a forest elder
i see this view
fields of gold
inhale...
...exhale
no place else
this dale
the catcher's beating heart
[at the edge of the field]
keeping
seeping
love
fields of gold
feels
of gold
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Re. fields of gold
14th Jun 2017 2:03pm
'catcher at the edge of the field' right away conjures an image
of a baseball field, it's that season;
but beyond that, this is a fine poem...
of a baseball field, it's that season;
but beyond that, this is a fine poem...
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Re: Re. fields of gold
Thank You John Feddeler.
Your visualization is commendable.
Thank You for thepositive feedback. Looks like am in good company here.
The catcher at the edge of the field refers to the catcher in the rye, keeping his beloved andd seping of his love for them.
Yes it is the season. :-) welcome :-)
Your visualization is commendable.
Thank You for thepositive feedback. Looks like am in good company here.
The catcher at the edge of the field refers to the catcher in the rye, keeping his beloved andd seping of his love for them.
Yes it is the season. :-) welcome :-)
Re. fields of gold
The Wheat Field. . .
Harvest shall come after patient endurance.
Welcome to the Deep Side, Cold One.
Harvest shall come after patient endurance.
Welcome to the Deep Side, Cold One.
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Re: Re. fields of gold
The wheat field at dawn and at dusk, a vison only a few, barring the birds and the farmer get to treasure.
I enjoyed my short stay here. Thank you for your welcome Ahavati.
Poem is the vision of an observer sitting with his back to an old maple tree, a forest elder, and observing a keeper of his fields of gold, his progeny, his beloveds, his ripe crop, which essentially are not much different for a keeper.
Good this is deep side. Deeper, the colder.
Thank you.
I enjoyed my short stay here. Thank you for your welcome Ahavati.
Poem is the vision of an observer sitting with his back to an old maple tree, a forest elder, and observing a keeper of his fields of gold, his progeny, his beloveds, his ripe crop, which essentially are not much different for a keeper.
Good this is deep side. Deeper, the colder.
Thank you.
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Re: Re. fields of gold
15th Jun 2017 1:57pm
Re. fields of gold
14th Jun 2017 6:35pm
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14th Jun 2017 7:09pm
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14th Jun 2017 9:37pm
Re. fields of gold
golden hues..seeping in ...the warmth. the needful love. your words light up dimming corners in me now.. welcome to du :)
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Re: Re. fields of gold
15th Jun 2017 6:51pm
Thank you. :-) welcome :-) Glad is the word to find good company, in this deep end. Also on learning of its reception at your end. Thank you.
Re. fields of gold
16th Jun 2017 1:54pm
firstly, welcome to this little corner of the interwebs. really hope you enjoy your stay...
... this is a stunning entry, the layers are complex & wonderfully interwoven.
"the catcher's beating heart
[at the edge of the field]
keeping
seeping
love"
^^^^
hold on, holden :)
i can't decide if this is unspeakably beautiful... the sense of calm that permeates your words is wonderfully crafted.
much enjoyed
~k
... this is a stunning entry, the layers are complex & wonderfully interwoven.
"the catcher's beating heart
[at the edge of the field]
keeping
seeping
love"
^^^^
hold on, holden :)
i can't decide if this is unspeakably beautiful... the sense of calm that permeates your words is wonderfully crafted.
much enjoyed
~k
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Thank you. Unusual warmth for a cold soul in a dark, deep and underground corner.
:-) welcome :-)
Appreciation intense, for the unravelling of the layers. Not often the occurence with my poems. May-hap I leave too much behind my hippocampus than on the paper. Glad, you read that what was left behind in a cold place.
Thanks ++ for the warmth in a cold place, a place teeming with meterorites and comets. And some comets are far luminous than others. :-)
Had to add, the L2 in the quoted afterwards as leaving it out was rendering too much to render.
Calm... perhaps it's associated naturally with the cold ones.
Appreciation and beyond.
:-)
:-) welcome :-)
Appreciation intense, for the unravelling of the layers. Not often the occurence with my poems. May-hap I leave too much behind my hippocampus than on the paper. Glad, you read that what was left behind in a cold place.
Thanks ++ for the warmth in a cold place, a place teeming with meterorites and comets. And some comets are far luminous than others. :-)
Had to add, the L2 in the quoted afterwards as leaving it out was rendering too much to render.
Calm... perhaps it's associated naturally with the cold ones.
Appreciation and beyond.
:-)