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I Trust the Stars, Which Makes No Sense
Your eyes are like glass on a fire escape,
they make leaving painful.
You remind me of a sadder me
That had not yet known the agony
Of a Capulet/Montague feud.
But a me that had never known such pain
Was a me without you,
And that just won’t do,
Because we aren’t starcrossed,
we’re lightyear stretched.
Distance is the Devil,
And Circumstance is a wretch,
Both defined by what they try to take…
… little do they know,
That there are hearts at stake.
But I know that a strong heart is not defined by what it lacks,
But by what it takes back from the ravenous entropy of the miles,
And that a pain earned is better than stolen joy.
You make me a better person.
I forget my existential angst when you smile.
And that makes you one of the best things that happen to me
they make leaving painful.
You remind me of a sadder me
That had not yet known the agony
Of a Capulet/Montague feud.
But a me that had never known such pain
Was a me without you,
And that just won’t do,
Because we aren’t starcrossed,
we’re lightyear stretched.
Distance is the Devil,
And Circumstance is a wretch,
Both defined by what they try to take…
… little do they know,
That there are hearts at stake.
But I know that a strong heart is not defined by what it lacks,
But by what it takes back from the ravenous entropy of the miles,
And that a pain earned is better than stolen joy.
You make me a better person.
I forget my existential angst when you smile.
And that makes you one of the best things that happen to me
Published 27th May 2017
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First, wow. What an opening to a poem. I'm pretty certain I know who this is for, which makes it even more profound because I so agree with its sentiment. ❤
You've captured pain beautifully with that opening, Alexander. Ending the stanza with the Romeo/Juliet reference reinforces the pain and further adds a dimension of conflicted struggle.
That second stanza melted my heart. It solidifies that the struggle to survive outweighs the pain of surrendering life to the loveless avenue previously lived.
The remainder simply reinforces the determination to exist beyond what was and into what you've become.
They say distance enflames the great Loves and extinguished the small. I've been quietly observing this struggle and can honestly say it's a great Love.
Trusting something that makes no sense, like the Stars, is the compass of the heart pointing due North.
Beautiful verse.
You've captured pain beautifully with that opening, Alexander. Ending the stanza with the Romeo/Juliet reference reinforces the pain and further adds a dimension of conflicted struggle.
That second stanza melted my heart. It solidifies that the struggle to survive outweighs the pain of surrendering life to the loveless avenue previously lived.
The remainder simply reinforces the determination to exist beyond what was and into what you've become.
They say distance enflames the great Loves and extinguished the small. I've been quietly observing this struggle and can honestly say it's a great Love.
Trusting something that makes no sense, like the Stars, is the compass of the heart pointing due North.
Beautiful verse.
27th May 2017 4:27pm
Ahh... your foreknowledge adds a dimension to your understanding that only a friend can have. :) but you misunderstood the poem. Its actually about my cat. Im leaving for college soon and im hurting because i have to leave my little princess behind.
27th May 2017 9:18pm
27th May 2017 1:20pm
it's a mix of anguish & elation, when your look meets the sadness;
enough to worry the stars...
enough to worry the stars...
1st Jun 2017 2:52pm
Congratulations! This poem has been nominated for Deep Underground Poetry's Featured Poem of the Month Competition for July, '17. You may view the nomination at the link below, and will be notified if selected.
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30th Dec 2018 5:54am
