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BETWIXT
Flesh of beasts birds and men
Wake with the sun
Sleep with her fall
Knowing she will come again
And how we pain each other
Lovage and clover
Cloven hoof lover
Till love comes back again
Evolving amoeba solace within
Raiments of longing
Melting icicle spikes
In raven dark and dankly driven
Go with the grain of the pines
Flow of fault lines
You were fashioned
For something other than this
Follow the flaw of the Great Rift
Fire hewn by fire raw
Paths apple mapped
Evening Adam to Eve to Paris
To the chaos we were made for
A goddess creation
Wrought of god ribs
Cracked teeth doused in oceans
Manudemised in man's image
To fracture the sun
In this conflict of air
Betwixt Creator creation created
You will again defy your identity
By death or design
By machine or mind
Into the forgiveless Chaos again
Wake with the sun
Sleep with her fall
Knowing she will come again
And how we pain each other
Lovage and clover
Cloven hoof lover
Till love comes back again
Evolving amoeba solace within
Raiments of longing
Melting icicle spikes
In raven dark and dankly driven
Go with the grain of the pines
Flow of fault lines
You were fashioned
For something other than this
Follow the flaw of the Great Rift
Fire hewn by fire raw
Paths apple mapped
Evening Adam to Eve to Paris
To the chaos we were made for
A goddess creation
Wrought of god ribs
Cracked teeth doused in oceans
Manudemised in man's image
To fracture the sun
In this conflict of air
Betwixt Creator creation created
You will again defy your identity
By death or design
By machine or mind
Into the forgiveless Chaos again
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Re. BETWIXT
10th May 2017 00:28am
Quite juicy this Write is Whale!!!
Full of cryptics, yet flowing with it's well hemmed lines.
Chaos seems to reign no matter how well we groom...we are tenders and only partial for as long as we are allowed.
Full of cryptics, yet flowing with it's well hemmed lines.
Chaos seems to reign no matter how well we groom...we are tenders and only partial for as long as we are allowed.
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12th May 2017 1:13pm
Re. BETWIXT
10th May 2017 1:00am
"To the chaos we were made for
A goddess creation
Wrought of god ribs
Cracked teeth doused in oceans"
Whale you are the very best of both of these masterful and wise..
love Brenda
A goddess creation
Wrought of god ribs
Cracked teeth doused in oceans"
Whale you are the very best of both of these masterful and wise..
love Brenda
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Re. BETWIXT
10th May 2017 1:57am
Re. BETWIXT
10th May 2017 2:25am
The opening gives me a strong impression of the cyclical nature of things. I love the passage Crimsin picked out in particular, also where you say forgiveless. Beautiful and contemplative work yet again my sagacious friend.
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Re. BETWIXT
10th May 2017 12:34pm
these are primitive lines,
men have walked among such poetry
when they did not know it was poetry;
if the machines would let me have wine & Paris
till love comes back...
men have walked among such poetry
when they did not know it was poetry;
if the machines would let me have wine & Paris
till love comes back...
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12th May 2017 1:16pm
Re. BETWIXT
10th May 2017 2:38pm
Great alliteration throughout, with slow steady build-up. Nice. :)
(I can't figure the significance of the word 'Manudemised' ... enlightenment favourably received.)
(I can't figure the significance of the word 'Manudemised' ... enlightenment favourably received.)
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12th May 2017 1:18pm
I felt there was a relationship with manufacture - demised being what's left after a death