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What The Hell???
you didn't see my light
in the darkness
neither will you see it
when the sunrise
darkness fades
an indelible mark
is made upon
my soul
feasts for the fathom
that has been plagued
a tortured being
which you adored
sick & twisted
dining on my own vomit
a wraith that lingered
truth denied
on wrath's bloodied cross
I will be a martyr
for my own cause
no more
you will no longer see me
wallow in self pity
I've taken the piss
now on with the show
Copyright © 2017 Crimsin. All Rights Reserved
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crimsin
(Unveiling)
Published 1st May 2017
| Edited 2nd May 2017
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1st May 2017 5:29pm
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1st May 2017 5:41pm
thank you dearest Jerry for showing love on this write.. love you my friend.. xo Brenda
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Anonymous
1st May 2017 6:06pm
what amazing strength in this write.
another great read from your soul touching pen
xx thank you
another great read from your soul touching pen
xx thank you
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2nd May 2017 11:01am
Re. What The Hell???
1st May 2017 7:02pm
This is an amazing piece. I can feel the emotion coming across including the pain and frustration. Another beautiful write from you.
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2nd May 2017 11:01am
Re. What The Hell???
1st May 2017 7:36pm
No more self pity! Hell yes! A queen of night such as yourself was not born to wallow.
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2nd May 2017 11:02am
thank you my Darkest Lord I'm going to do my best not to indulge myself this way.. love Crim
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Anonymous
1st May 2017 7:48pm
Absolutely love this! Strong and defiant. And here I sit, grinning like a fool
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2nd May 2017 11:03am
Re. What The Hell???
1st May 2017 8:49pm
Wise words Crim! I applaud you for keeping your martyrdom personal and refusing to indulge in self-pity. There are some particularly shocking lines to this, like
sick & twisted
dining on my own vomit
a wraith that lingered
truth denied
But I can take it Crim. I love the conclusion, a statement of strength and pride. On with the show fine Lady!
sick & twisted
dining on my own vomit
a wraith that lingered
truth denied
But I can take it Crim. I love the conclusion, a statement of strength and pride. On with the show fine Lady!
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2nd May 2017 11:05am
thank you Sir Crow this one was a toss up between dark and spiritual poems.. pleased you got something from this one despite the shocking visuals :) love Crim
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1st May 2017 9:04pm
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2nd May 2017 11:05am
Re. What The Hell???
2nd May 2017 6:22am
"I've taken the piss
now on with the show" > hell yeah!
Such a strong write, dear Crim, I'm sitting here with a huge smile on my face...
Love, Duende
now on with the show" > hell yeah!
Such a strong write, dear Crim, I'm sitting here with a huge smile on my face...
Love, Duende
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2nd May 2017 11:06am
thank you beautiful Duende for showing love on this write pleased to bring you smiles :) love Crim
Re. What The Hell???
Embracing the darkness,
no need to justify what is.
The way you use it to draw strength from
what crushes many...
Much enjoyed, talented one.
no need to justify what is.
The way you use it to draw strength from
what crushes many...
Much enjoyed, talented one.
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Re: Re. What The Hell???
2nd May 2017 11:07am
thank you lovely Kasai I'm attempting to let my light shine through all my darkness.. love Crim
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2nd May 2017 11:08am
thank you graciously John I will do my best to be good to my heart.. love Brenda
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2nd May 2017 4:06pm
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4th May 2017 2:09pm
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2nd May 2017 6:37pm
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4th May 2017 2:09pm
thank you dearest Kavik for visiting my pages from the darkness your light shines warrior soul.. love Brenda
Re. What The Hell???
2nd May 2017 7:53pm
I always appreciate true defiance - On with the show :-)
excellent ink - 1000 ehugs on their way :-)
excellent ink - 1000 ehugs on their way :-)
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4th May 2017 2:10pm
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Anonymous
15th May 2017 1:55am
My Beautiful Brenda, sometimes we take what holds us down and will turn it into what makes us strong...the strength is on overcoming our weaknesses...and you are one of the strongest women I know. I love you so very much!
Love Taryn xoxo
Love Taryn xoxo
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15th May 2017 6:20am
aw thank you my love for seeing me in this light :) I love and cherish you.. xo Brenda
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Anonymous
17th May 2017 4:44am
Brenda.. we must all go on with the show.. love you..
Dave
Dave
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18th May 2017 1:06am