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Longing Something
A million kisses given
A million hugs received
I sit alone
in a cold room, illuminated by a blue light,
my boring life.
I stare at this blue light as my life passes by.
The tree in a desert, almost dead.
Waiting for water.
Wanting sun.
Wanting...love.
No kisses given
No hugs taken.
One life wasted but one life longing.
Just one thing.
Its so simple yet too far or not good enough.
Never good enough.
So I keep sitting alone, waiting, wanting
As dark waters kiss me where it feels....good....
A million hugs received
I sit alone
in a cold room, illuminated by a blue light,
my boring life.
I stare at this blue light as my life passes by.
The tree in a desert, almost dead.
Waiting for water.
Wanting sun.
Wanting...love.
No kisses given
No hugs taken.
One life wasted but one life longing.
Just one thing.
Its so simple yet too far or not good enough.
Never good enough.
So I keep sitting alone, waiting, wanting
As dark waters kiss me where it feels....good....
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Re. Longing Something
28th Apr 2017 7:08pm
Deep sadness. You need a new light bulb. Blue is how you feel. White will enlighten you, red will fill you with desire. Seek the rainbow coming after the storm...
JJ
JJ
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Re. Longing Something
6th May 2017 11:46pm
My reading of the the poem is that it's very evocative in painting a picture of stuckness, rooted in lostness and despair.
I reckon taking action (almost any action) helps shift things (i.e.: stuckness); it creates momentum from which new things can emerge and grow. Not always easy, but possible.
I reckon taking action (almost any action) helps shift things (i.e.: stuckness); it creates momentum from which new things can emerge and grow. Not always easy, but possible.
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Re. Longing Something
26th May 2017 1:59am
deep longing...
i definitely know the feeling, waiting, wanting feeling incomplete,
i'm there with you
i definitely know the feeling, waiting, wanting feeling incomplete,
i'm there with you
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Re. Longing Something
Anonymous
20th Jul 2017 00:29am
Your words are very haunting and very real to me and the title conveys the feeling. Nice.
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Re. Longing Something
21st Jul 2017 00:21am
stop waiting for mr vanilla ...you will do better so very cute baby girl with men in general if managed properly ...meaning they sometimes need a velvet fist and yeah there will be tears sometimes ...Men are like flowers pick them and love them til they die to you or you die to them....go play baby girl...you look like messy hair ice cream
grrrrrrrrr Hahhaaaa :)
grrrrrrrrr Hahhaaaa :)
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Re: Re. Longing Something
21st Jul 2017 3:14am
True! and thank u! Messy hair ice cream! OMG! I love that. Ima use that :'D
Re. Longing Something
6th Aug 2017 00:20am
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Re. Longing Something
27th Sep 2017 11:36pm
Re. Longing Something
10th Mar 2018 11:50am
This captures loneliness so perfectly. I could feel every line, took me back to times that I've felt this way. Bravo my dear poetess, an emoting/evoking write.
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Re. Longing Something
23rd Mar 2018 10:56am
I feel you - myself have walked in the same shoes
But to live life in full colour you have to overpower the 'Blues..'
But to live life in full colour you have to overpower the 'Blues..'
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Re. Longing Something
20th Apr 2018 12:03pm
Re. Longing Something
2nd May 2018 4:26am
you caught the mood and atmosphere well...it's been a year...time for a new poem :)
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