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Out of Sorts
My place in the world has been usurped
I’ve been kicked out physically
I’ve been evicted internally
My flavour has been changed
My sweetness has been altered
I have less fat and less sugar
I am almost suitable for vegetarians
I feel odd. Like I don’t belong
Like a drip looking for a puddle
Like a chip looking for some dip
Like a bullet looking for a gun
Like a shit looking for a flush
I’ve been feeling out of sorts
I am kinda me, but not me
I am becoming what am required
I am evolving into what you demand
I am being assimilated borgesque
What was the point of my surrender?
My individuality lies in tatters
My true self consistently attacked
You ensured I was diluted
You ensured I was moulded
Into your desired minion
Still:
The glint of this bayonet
Gives me hope
That a little piece
Of me still exists
Well; enough to see you dead
All this time I have lived for you
I’ve surrendered,
I’ve bled for you
Now it’s your turn
Published 5th Apr 2017
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5th Apr 2017 2:47am
Whoa! What a twist and turn, David! I thought at first it was evolution, then I realized it wasn't. Then I realized what it really was!
6th Apr 2017 2:27am
eeeeeek! I kinda like twisty things so if you thought it was something then you saw it was something else I am happy :-)
5th Apr 2017 4:43am
I know and feel this deeply. You are not alone my friend. Never alone. <3
6th Apr 2017 2:28am
out of sorts is a strange feeling - being at odds is rarely a happy thing :-( thank you for being so supportive :-)
5th Apr 2017 7:05am
That is so deep. Thank you for opening that window and allowing us to see inside your soul. HUGE HUGS!
6th Apr 2017 2:29am
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5th Apr 2017 5:04pm
Hey David........what a heart felt ink......truly made me feel your struggles and a powerful statement in the end......enjoyed......purple luv & hugs xo :)
6th Apr 2017 3:05am
5th Apr 2017 7:49pm
Hi David, great poem.
For feed-back I feel the poem would best end (punchier) with the line "gives me hope" - (it feels a bit diluted after that).
For feed-back I feel the poem would best end (punchier) with the line "gives me hope" - (it feels a bit diluted after that).
6th Apr 2017 3:08am
thank you Josh, you may well be write, sometimes I lack a bit of restraint and maybe give too much away - :-)
6th Apr 2017 1:57am
Hey my dearest friend I've missed you so much. It does seem as though we're always on the verge of something yet can't quite surrender, not if surrendering means giving up the last tiny fragment of ourselves and then everybody acts so surprised when we show our true colors. I'm always out of sorts anymore and this poem i can relate to so easily. If you need to talk I'm here my friend, much much love and mad respect,
me
me
6th Apr 2017 3:08am
6th Apr 2017 3:42am
That David you can be assured of, with me your never ever alone dearest friend. Much much love and mad respect, me
