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A Previous Dissever
A Previous Dissever
A clearly glorious past
Now a promised future
Unconditional forever
Beholding the best within
A fundamental knowing
Trust we shall endeavour
Inspiration of passion
Love instilled desire
Our bond ought not to sever
Each other’s confidants
Adoring ardently
Neglect not whatsoever
Admire, cherish madly
Romantic enamouring
Embodies us together
Nevermore
Shall we dissever
A clearly glorious past
Now a promised future
Unconditional forever
Beholding the best within
A fundamental knowing
Trust we shall endeavour
Inspiration of passion
Love instilled desire
Our bond ought not to sever
Each other’s confidants
Adoring ardently
Neglect not whatsoever
Admire, cherish madly
Romantic enamouring
Embodies us together
Nevermore
Shall we dissever
Published 18th Mar 2017
| Edited 2nd Feb 2025
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18th Mar 2017 1:01pm
I keep wanting to make that final line a couplet for both emphasis and thyme.
Nevermore
Shall we dissever
L3 of each tercet is the musical sound to the compositions of 1 & 2, and carries the tune throughout.
Nevermore
Shall we dissever
L3 of each tercet is the musical sound to the compositions of 1 & 2, and carries the tune throughout.
18th Mar 2017 1:25pm
I made that change...I agree...do you think it would be better if I also followed the structure from above lines?...I might be able to work that out.
18th Mar 2017 1:34pm
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19th Mar 2017 9:07am
19th Mar 2017 1:53pm
25th Mar 2017 3:26am
The poem title seems to somewhat conflict the strong romance within your piece, by seemingly implying that a dissever still occured after the poem was written. but I really like the romantic diction like "ardently," "enamouring," "confidants," and etc.
