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Mon amant reve
I held you close all night, we chased music and smoke
and the poems we wrote in a dream. We danced in the rain
and the wind tried to blow us apart, but when I awoke
you were still there.
You spoke of a strange and beautiful garden
where I tended the rows by moonlight. A delicate affair;
dancing between beds of flame and emerald, naked
grace and sway of hips, bare soles soutenu.
I brought you back to the abor of my arms
and loved you among the rosebuds and clematis vines.
Beneath the archway, an arcadian heart flourishes,
fed of an intoxicating elixer; a lovers' melange.
Our bete noir: lonely hands left empty.
As the music plays, the smoke entwines us,
and the poems are too distant to catch;
we make love in the riptide of the storm.
Better to love you in dream
than to wake and reach for your ghost.
(Photo by Georges Pierre)
and the poems we wrote in a dream. We danced in the rain
and the wind tried to blow us apart, but when I awoke
you were still there.
You spoke of a strange and beautiful garden
where I tended the rows by moonlight. A delicate affair;
dancing between beds of flame and emerald, naked
grace and sway of hips, bare soles soutenu.
I brought you back to the abor of my arms
and loved you among the rosebuds and clematis vines.
Beneath the archway, an arcadian heart flourishes,
fed of an intoxicating elixer; a lovers' melange.
Our bete noir: lonely hands left empty.
As the music plays, the smoke entwines us,
and the poems are too distant to catch;
we make love in the riptide of the storm.
Better to love you in dream
than to wake and reach for your ghost.
(Photo by Georges Pierre)
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Re. Mon amant reve
16th Mar 2017 6:34am
delicate, yes; a dream, a poem, a dance.
but the storm is as intense as making love;
it's a furthering of passion, Kas...
but the storm is as intense as making love;
it's a furthering of passion, Kas...
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Re: Re. Mon amant reve
16th Mar 2017 6:54am
The intensity of passion rides the current of a storm all the way to our dreams and finds its way into the delicate lines of a love poem. We dance in the rain. Such beautiful words you leave for me, thank you, John...
Re. Mon amant reve
16th Mar 2017 10:13am
I'm enchanted by the mystical feeling I get from this write! Feels like a dream sequence playing in my mind. And that epic ending!! So powerful! Love this! Nice work!
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Re: Re. Mon amant reve
17th Mar 2017 1:59am
Most definately a dream sequence, thank you much for the kind read and comment. Glad you enjoyed...
Re. Mon amant reve
Anonymous
16th Mar 2017 11:11am
What a beautiful walk through the garden of your verse. Those last lines are truth in gold
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Re: Re. Mon amant reve
17th Mar 2017 5:17am
Re. Mon amant reve
16th Mar 2017 12:57pm
The beauty and intensity is dripping off the page...Vos mots chantent de l'amour
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Beautiful comment, Tim, thank you for the kind words and a place on your RL.
Much appreciated...
Much appreciated...
Re. Mon amant reve
16th Mar 2017 11:28pm
Such a beautiful spin of romanticism n imagery... n Yea...this-
"Better to love you in dream
than to wake and reach for your ghost."
Stole my breath... :)
"Better to love you in dream
than to wake and reach for your ghost."
Stole my breath... :)
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Re: Re. Mon amant reve
18th Mar 2017 4:33am
Thanks for visiting, Pm, really appreciate the your taking the time to read and leave me with such great comments. Glad you enjoyed...
Re. Mon amant reve
Holy Mother that final couplet is divine. The entire verse bears your signature noir laced in feminine beauty, Kas.
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Re: Re. Mon amant reve
18th Mar 2017 4:35am
Left me with a big smile, wise one, such a lovely visit. Flattered to have you on my pages...
Re. Mon amant reve
17th Mar 2017 4:04am
all dream dance
and
end up in romance
you have a lovely flow of thoughts
perchance
and
end up in romance
you have a lovely flow of thoughts
perchance
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Re: Re. Mon amant reve
18th Mar 2017 4:50am
Re. Mon amant reve
17th Mar 2017 6:29pm
This is a great poem. You are a rock star. You can easily be the poet laureate of the world.
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Re: Re. Mon amant reve
18th Mar 2017 4:53am
So kind of you, thanks much. Laureate-how flattering, even if I did have to look it up. Thanks for the new word...
Re. Mon amant reve
19th Mar 2017 3:27am
Re: Re. Mon amant reve
19th Mar 2017 5:56am
And a heavy one at that. Thank you so much for the visit, whale, I appreciate the great comment...
Re. Mon amant reve
20th Mar 2017 3:41am
The imagery is superbly vivid! Stunning piece of poetry.
Better to love you in dream
than to wake and reach for your ghost.
This last couplet brilliant!
Thank you for sharing.
Better to love you in dream
than to wake and reach for your ghost.
This last couplet brilliant!
Thank you for sharing.
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Re: Re. Mon amant reve
20th Mar 2017 5:05am
And thank you for such a great comment. So glad to hear you enjoyed, truly appreciate it...
Re. Mon amant reve
20th Mar 2017 3:17pm
As said by many before me: those two lines are stunning!
The whole poem reads like a dream and the title suits it so well...
Breathtakingly beautiful write, Kasai
The whole poem reads like a dream and the title suits it so well...
Breathtakingly beautiful write, Kasai
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Re: Re. Mon amant reve
20th Mar 2017 5:53pm
Perhaps dreams run deeper than we realize. Thank you so much, sweet lady, so glad you came for another visit...
Re: Re. Mon amant reve
21st Mar 2017 12:13pm
I was (and still am) behind on commenting, but I always catch up! (forgot to put 'last' before 'two lines' but you probably understood)
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Re: Re. Mon amant reve
21st Mar 2017 3:24pm
Of course I did, and let me just say I am extrememly behind as well. It's hard to play catch up. No worries, Duende...