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a collection of short poems [6]
ass-ender prototype
she had no ass
but her tits overcompensated
like a canard
kept her upright most of the time
except
when she nosedived
crashing into netherlands
let go
he resisted the invitation
to touch
run his fingers through curlicues
to draw
the wild fringe from her eyes
with immense fortitude he denied the urge
to bind his coveting hand
and pull her hair
with urgency and affection
much
to her disappointment
premature ejaculation [true erotica]
she handed me
a tissue
snigger-veers
mould this man from snowpack
with soft mittened hands
kiss button eyes and caromed nose
with tender pouted lips
carve my heart
crush my soul
with ice pick and sledgehammer
from clumps of black ice
and champagne snow
Published 15th Mar 2017
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15th Mar 2017 3:05pm
12th Aug 2017 2:50pm
Anonymous
15th Mar 2017 6:11pm
well ya know, some gents aren't worth the admission price of a rubber ... but such is life.
anyhoos, bloody brilliant case, nice 'n edgy
i'd take a peek at l1 of "let go" somethin' isn't kosher there, made me stumble a bit
can't fault a thing about this otherwise
anyhoos, bloody brilliant case, nice 'n edgy
i'd take a peek at l1 of "let go" somethin' isn't kosher there, made me stumble a bit
can't fault a thing about this otherwise
You're not suggesting, I mean... you've got the wrong idea if you think... it's never happened... not in twenty years! It makes you wonder though, so many erotic poets, such experts about sex, I reckon most of them would be a quivering mess in less than a minute.
You were bang on with that let go line. I was playing around with it before I posted the poem. I was totally unkosher thinking I could pull it off with such an old timer word. I've done the switch and think it reads heaps better.
Thanks heaps for your honest stumbling eye and for stopping by to comment. We should stop stalking each other's poems and do this more often. :P
You were bang on with that let go line. I was playing around with it before I posted the poem. I was totally unkosher thinking I could pull it off with such an old timer word. I've done the switch and think it reads heaps better.
Thanks heaps for your honest stumbling eye and for stopping by to comment. We should stop stalking each other's poems and do this more often. :P
Mr. Case love the honesty of this down to her no having ass and making it up with those gorgeous breasts ;)
yeah pre ejaculation happens this made me smile it's vulnerable in its truth..
one of the best erotics I've read..
the ending really packed a punch great write!
love Brenda
yeah pre ejaculation happens this made me smile it's vulnerable in its truth..
one of the best erotics I've read..
the ending really packed a punch great write!
love Brenda
Honestly, my tits and ass poems are all tongue in cheek [no pun intended]... and I don't believe you that it's one of the best erotics you've read... it's only two lines... now I sound like I'm pushing drugs. Thanks heaps for dropping by Brenda.
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15th Mar 2017 9:44pm
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19th Mar 2017 2:46am
Cheers man, I'll grab her number later. Sometimes the short poems is all I got in me, but I'm cool with that, any fragments of creativity is a gift. Thanks for the feedback, I appreciate you dropping in.
16th Mar 2017 6:00pm
all excellent but strangely my favourite is the premature arrival poem :-)
19th Mar 2017 2:49am
...and I'm milking the poem for all it's worth. I'd be strangely amused if I could win a comp with a couple of lines of erotic humour. I'm on a mission from the erotic gods. Thanks heaps for dropping by David.
20th Mar 2017 5:03pm
ur short poems show how u keep on experimenting n get towards perfection n versatility of themes n topics, Case.
the 2 and 4 are my favs from all the 4 great reads- each one you handle it differently in style n execution. the first one - aerodynamical erotic humor lifting n crashing down, ah - i liked your take n ideas;) the 2nd one - loved the intense descripts where you are a master u hardcore poet, esp. the wild fringe of her eyes..ironic to the title, its like never letting go, this magnetism ingrained ..'resistance' just tactfully says it fluorishes gigantic inner :)
the 3rd..truly a minimalistic hit/art;)
the 4th, the breeze n storm effect..words make it perfect..
my takeaways are more..at many other levels.thats the beauty of short verses. n u do it ryt always.
Write on :)
the 2 and 4 are my favs from all the 4 great reads- each one you handle it differently in style n execution. the first one - aerodynamical erotic humor lifting n crashing down, ah - i liked your take n ideas;) the 2nd one - loved the intense descripts where you are a master u hardcore poet, esp. the wild fringe of her eyes..ironic to the title, its like never letting go, this magnetism ingrained ..'resistance' just tactfully says it fluorishes gigantic inner :)
the 3rd..truly a minimalistic hit/art;)
the 4th, the breeze n storm effect..words make it perfect..
my takeaways are more..at many other levels.thats the beauty of short verses. n u do it ryt always.
Write on :)
