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3/8 Of A Moment
What scars
trail swaths through blades of grass
wilt low
drying yellow by the bask of an all day sun
who knew
the lethal charms beamed ostentatious
i watched
pillows roll tears to an open field
cross-legged
watching pink skies fade to white
with distance
two thumbs
twiddled, coaxing moisture from hay stalks
spun gold
left in willowed ends delicate and beautiful
sown sacred
as nature knows how to always give, endless
loom shadow
and watch as the moon rises, wane with pity
satr luminance
and two cranes flown silhouette
cry out
trail swaths through blades of grass
wilt low
drying yellow by the bask of an all day sun
who knew
the lethal charms beamed ostentatious
i watched
pillows roll tears to an open field
cross-legged
watching pink skies fade to white
with distance
two thumbs
twiddled, coaxing moisture from hay stalks
spun gold
left in willowed ends delicate and beautiful
sown sacred
as nature knows how to always give, endless
loom shadow
and watch as the moon rises, wane with pity
satr luminance
and two cranes flown silhouette
cry out
Published 8th Mar 2017
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9th Mar 2017 4:27pm
That eye-blink brevity of beauty that one experiences within a rural twilight......
vivid imagery that pulls readers into the serenity of (a) "3/8 Of A Moment" of fleeting magic!.
My friend...this is an exemplary piece of pastoral poetry...entrancing....enjoyable--especially to those of us that appreciate nature"s splendor!
vivid imagery that pulls readers into the serenity of (a) "3/8 Of A Moment" of fleeting magic!.
My friend...this is an exemplary piece of pastoral poetry...entrancing....enjoyable--especially to those of us that appreciate nature"s splendor!
Always Appreciate You DE -Thank You for feeling me!!!
And such tender words!!!
And such tender words!!!
13th Mar 2017 11:27pm
You're always carrying me into these moments..
.gosh damn it Soula!
Thank you dear love, for the breaths. As always
fresh.
-Howlings
.gosh damn it Soula!
Thank you dear love, for the breaths. As always
fresh.
-Howlings
14th Mar 2017 2:23am
To see Your comments to My Writes-Always makes me Smile!!! Thank You Always for support.
15th Mar 2017 3:04am
Gorgeous writing, Gabriel, with an interesting structure housing terrific details. Great job !
16th Mar 2017 3:02am
Thank You My Friend!!! Hope You liked the structure, My hopes were to have them support but equally speak separate.
Anonymous
18th Mar 2017 7:23pm
Today, if there's a better line than "the lethal charms beamed ostentatious" that sounds more beautiful when read aloud, I'd like to hear it lol
I read all poems out loud and this is such a joy to recite. The fraction is an interesting feature which gives this impression of a split in time, of a moment captured and made aware. Your relationship with the natural and of the (goddess) divine shines through in eloquent shades in this piece.
No bother reading listing this one at all. Thank you for the read.
I read all poems out loud and this is such a joy to recite. The fraction is an interesting feature which gives this impression of a split in time, of a moment captured and made aware. Your relationship with the natural and of the (goddess) divine shines through in eloquent shades in this piece.
No bother reading listing this one at all. Thank you for the read.
haha no reads from me lol Astute observations Kidd-O ;) If I said it out loud while Writing or after, I'd ruin it for myself...The voice (s) in my head sound great though ;)
Thank You!!!
Thank You!!!
Anonymous
25th Mar 2017 8:59pm
Fleeting moments, watching how things we had slip by and we let it go..because it has to be..damn, now re-reading this i love it even more.
27th Mar 2017 2:29am
Thank You...its a sensitive Write for me... Some things yes...and others worth fighting for!!!
