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Canal Craft
Locks open
letting waves flow
free
we stood aghast
almost slipping
from
the hallowed canal
pebbles roll
as mule teams kick
planted
hoofs and heartbeat
in sojourn, snorting
wile the wooden craft
readied
Were that the windows had been open
maybe
all could see
hold
tines with ties
The breath that hung to the air
frost, biting your beard
we only saw
gray
remains
long hair and cut-off fingers
as your body
hauled
out
mourned over
sounds
of water, slapping
coated
boat and gawker
flowers, sympathy sings
cries upon shore
Farewell...
We watch...
Your boat slip into the river
letting waves flow
free
we stood aghast
almost slipping
from
the hallowed canal
pebbles roll
as mule teams kick
planted
hoofs and heartbeat
in sojourn, snorting
wile the wooden craft
readied
Were that the windows had been open
maybe
all could see
hold
tines with ties
The breath that hung to the air
frost, biting your beard
we only saw
gray
remains
long hair and cut-off fingers
as your body
hauled
out
mourned over
sounds
of water, slapping
coated
boat and gawker
flowers, sympathy sings
cries upon shore
Farewell...
We watch...
Your boat slip into the river
Published 10th Mar 2017
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10th Mar 2017 10:07am
You remind me of one of the first instances I saw of such a send off- Johnny Depp's Dead Man! Left the then teenager me affected.. Your vivid imagery and deft depiction left me speechless!
Simply awesome ink Soul!
Simply awesome ink Soul!
10th Mar 2017 10:02pm
It's good to see You KD, Kind You are-What a great flick to be compared to-That's a film with GREAT lines!!! "I don't give a pigs ass what anyone says, I still say You make a hell of a pot of beans"
10th Mar 2017 1:17pm
this made me recall a Viking burial,
pyre of a ship on the water;
leaving softly...
pyre of a ship on the water;
leaving softly...
10th Mar 2017 10:03pm
10th Mar 2017 2:23pm
As someone who has seen what can come of canals I was entranced with your work. Thank you.
10th Mar 2017 10:05pm
Thank You for visiting this Write-Very personal indeed!!! I live near a canal area so it is engrained. Appreciate Your kindness!!!
15th Mar 2017 3:00am
16th Mar 2017 2:58am
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16th Mar 2017 3:00am
17th Mar 2017 9:34pm
I like the way the poem moves from the 'everyday' to something evermore intriguing, deep and oblique.
(Stanza 2, line 6: is that "wile" (as in trick, cunning procedure) or while (as in conjunction"?)
(Stanza 2, line 6: is that "wile" (as in trick, cunning procedure) or while (as in conjunction"?)
18th Mar 2017 5:04am
Hey Ma'man Appreciate You coming by again and the Kind words!!! Indeed "wile" -away the hrs.
Anonymous
25th Mar 2017 8:57pm
thank you for sending pictures of the canal, now this poem has more of a meaning to me :)
27th Mar 2017 2:33am
