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I write because I must
or the words will burn my lips
as I choke on them
to keep from spilling my seed
into the world
I drink to silence the thoughts
that bubble to the surface
& when I'm in that nether place
they find their way out
with vodka stained breaths
I give them life
they intoxicate the sober mind
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22nd Feb 2017 4:34pm
There aren't many words in this one but they are potent. I feel you on the writing to stop them from eating away at you. Many hugs and much love, my lady :)
Willow
Willow
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Re: Re. &
22nd Feb 2017 4:39pm
thank you dearest Willow I was going to add to it and realized it was finished :) lots of love to you lovely one.. xo Brenda
Re. &
22nd Feb 2017 4:46pm
these rebels inside us won't stay quiet, Crim,
like a baby needs to be born;
we call them poems...
like a baby needs to be born;
we call them poems...
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22nd Feb 2017 5:26pm
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22nd Feb 2017 5:26pm
Re. &
22nd Feb 2017 7:44pm
I can definitely relate to this, sometimes you just have to get it out of you. This is an effective and relatable poem. X
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22nd Feb 2017 8:00pm
Re. &
22nd Feb 2017 8:22pm
This leaves me tipsy Crim. Please don't silence the thoughts that lead to such wonderful lines. & great job by the way!
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23rd Feb 2017 10:12am
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Anonymous
23rd Feb 2017 3:04am
My Beautiful Brenda, I will gladly take your words as a substitute for my Blackhaus any day...I hope I never have to go through withdrawal. Loved this!
I love you!
Xoxo Taryn
I love you!
Xoxo Taryn
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Re: Re. &
23rd Feb 2017 10:19am
aw my beautiful one if you could see the smile on my face you would know how deeply you always touch me and how much I love, adore you :) I love you!!! xo Brenda
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23rd Feb 2017 10:20am
Re. &
23rd Feb 2017 5:08am
Me and you both 😉
Though I drink for other reasons. My thoughts go with or without... hehe. Wonderful read.
Though I drink for other reasons. My thoughts go with or without... hehe. Wonderful read.
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Re: Re. &
23rd Feb 2017 10:21am
aw thank you cheers to that :) yeah mine do too a liquor helps though for me lol ;) love Crim
Re. &
23rd Feb 2017 11:28am
Love this one, dear Crim
It's a bit different than your usual lines and shorter, but's so powerful!
That last line is plain brilliant... words as a substitue...
Love, Duende
It's a bit different than your usual lines and shorter, but's so powerful!
That last line is plain brilliant... words as a substitue...
Love, Duende
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23rd Feb 2017 12:33pm
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23rd Feb 2017 1:37pm
Who amongst us DOESN'T feel these
words are like our blood? We spill, we release.... excellent driving home ur '
point lady! :)
words are like our blood? We spill, we release.... excellent driving home ur '
point lady! :)
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23rd Feb 2017 11:56pm
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25th Feb 2017 2:31pm
Brenda.. feeling this ink.. and the need to create.. into the list it goes.. love..
Dave
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3rd Mar 2017 11:56am
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31st Mar 2017 4:39pm
Trying at times to quiet the thoughts, numbing the pain...... But still it comes back to haunt you so we have to let it out not matter how we try at times to push things back down..... Felt you on this one hun....
~BSavvy
~BSavvy
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4th Apr 2017 5:42pm