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Haiku Renga: Alone on Valentine's
at Balboa Lake
sitting by the sunny edge
tossing geese dried bread
• ☀️ •
dreaming 'neath the trees
watching couples foot-peddle
in their rental boats
• 🚤 •
tourist visitors
on holiday take selfies
me in the background
• 📷 •
ducks gather & quack
I write in my field journal
the kids quacking back
• ✏️📖 •
walking slow head down
looking for two perfect stones
souvenirs to keep
• 👣 •
calling on my cell
telling him I have his gift
when he's off from work
• 🐯🐱 •
Renga = linked Haiku
sitting by the sunny edge
tossing geese dried bread
• ☀️ •
dreaming 'neath the trees
watching couples foot-peddle
in their rental boats
• 🚤 •
tourist visitors
on holiday take selfies
me in the background
• 📷 •
ducks gather & quack
I write in my field journal
the kids quacking back
• ✏️📖 •
walking slow head down
looking for two perfect stones
souvenirs to keep
• 👣 •
calling on my cell
telling him I have his gift
when he's off from work
• 🐯🐱 •
Renga = linked Haiku
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Re. Haiku Renga: Alone on Valentine's
13th Feb 2017 7:03pm
I like this day in the park...
Early spring, Los Angeles...
I love your Renga...
Oh for a day in the park!
tommy
Early spring, Los Angeles...
I love your Renga...
Oh for a day in the park!
tommy
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13th Feb 2017 7:34pm
Re. Haiku Renga: Alone on Valentine's
13th Feb 2017 11:50pm
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14th Feb 2017 2:27am
Re. Haiku Renga: Alone on Valentine's
14th Feb 2017 1:44am
Re: Re. Haiku Renga: Alone on Valentine's
14th Feb 2017 2:32am
Aaww, Sage sister, my thanks for your support & personal pick. I love that you did that!
Re. Haiku Renga: Alone on Valentine's
14th Feb 2017 5:56am
Bit of a sad poem, I can relate in a way, the feeling that you should be with someone yet you're not, seemingly every one else is though. Touching persona pen, Jade.
~anonshadow😏
~anonshadow😏
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14th Feb 2017 12:59pm
Re. Haiku Renga: Alone on Valentine's
14th Feb 2017 6:59am
What a beautiful place to be,
just absorbing the day, waiting for him...
You have such a way with words, taking us along with you.
So calming, Jade...
just absorbing the day, waiting for him...
You have such a way with words, taking us along with you.
So calming, Jade...
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Re: Re. Haiku Renga: Alone on Valentine's
Thank you dear sister, I'm very touched when a reader of anything I write feels like they have walked with me.
Re. Haiku Renga: Alone on Valentine's
14th Feb 2017 11:37am
Re: Re. Haiku Renga: Alone on Valentine's
14th Feb 2017 1:12pm
Ah yes, John (and my thanks for you stopping by), a day that is also a bittersweet reminder.
Re. Haiku Renga: Alone on Valentine's
15th Feb 2017 00:51am
First time I've knowingly read a linked haiku. Impressive! I love your lines whatever the form. Happy Valentine's Day Jadey!
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Re: Re. Haiku Renga: Alone on Valentine's
15th Feb 2017 2:14pm
Why thank you, my crowfly friend, what a dear expression. I'm glad you enjoyed your first known foray into Renga. I've published Renga & Rensaku all along, so I warmly welcome you to my world.🎏