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I Can't Help Myself
I can't help myself!
I keep falling into the same hole that I dug,
Being stupid like a mindless little bug.
I say I'm not going to make the same mistake again,
Because I'm tired of living a that's life full of sin.
I can't help myself!
The temptations are way too much,
My temptations are addicting like the softness of a touch.
I can't help myself!
Sometimes I cry because of the person that I am,
It's like the devil keeps selling me the same old scam.
I keep falling for it over and over,
All the devil has to say is roll over.
I can't help myself!
I know I'm young and I'll make mistakes,
But one mistake is all that it takes.
One mindless decision could ruin my life,
The decision that makes me choose a life or a knife.
I can't help myself!
I try to crawl up the hole,
But it's like I lost my soul.
Sometimes I do things and I don't care,
Theres a feeling of numbness that no one can repair.
I can't help myself!
It's crazy what temptations will do,
Making you feel they will always be apart of you.
It's like I can't say no,
It's throwing me over and over again in the same hole.
I can't help myself...
I keep falling into the same hole that I dug,
Being stupid like a mindless little bug.
I say I'm not going to make the same mistake again,
Because I'm tired of living a that's life full of sin.
I can't help myself!
The temptations are way too much,
My temptations are addicting like the softness of a touch.
I can't help myself!
Sometimes I cry because of the person that I am,
It's like the devil keeps selling me the same old scam.
I keep falling for it over and over,
All the devil has to say is roll over.
I can't help myself!
I know I'm young and I'll make mistakes,
But one mistake is all that it takes.
One mindless decision could ruin my life,
The decision that makes me choose a life or a knife.
I can't help myself!
I try to crawl up the hole,
But it's like I lost my soul.
Sometimes I do things and I don't care,
Theres a feeling of numbness that no one can repair.
I can't help myself!
It's crazy what temptations will do,
Making you feel they will always be apart of you.
It's like I can't say no,
It's throwing me over and over again in the same hole.
I can't help myself...
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Re. I Can't Help Myself
I like your poem and the way you've used repitition of certain things like the phrase "I can't help myself" which emphasises your struggle against the temptations. There are a few occasions of wording which could be jigged around to make it more tight and help the flow such as "Being stupid like a mindless little bug." perhaps "As stupid as a..." or "I'm as stupid as..." and "crying because of the person that I am" perhaps "crying because of who I am"... Overall a great exploration of your helplessness against these temptations and a good job with rhyming. Hope the suggestions on your wording are helpful. Hope to see more poetry by you. 😊 X
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12th Feb 2017 2:15pm
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12th Feb 2017 2:45pm
No problem, you're welcome 😊 It's all about helping each other out. P.S I made a slight mistake in my comment so I have just rectified it. Autocorrect had added a word in 🙄 haha. X
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12th Feb 2017 8:17pm
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13th Feb 2017 2:07am
Re. I Can't Help Myself
13th Feb 2017 1:42am
I felt that! I can relate as well. Life is full of temptations. That's how some may feel. You're readers will be feeling you. Keep writing and don't stop.🙂
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Re. I Can't Help Myself
13th Feb 2017 2:09am
I feel it a great read and for your age very well done most people double your age can't write that good lol
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13th Feb 2017 2:18am
Lol thank you! I love to read and write. I got tired of not sharing my thoughts and feelings and decided it was time to share. Again, thank you for your support.
Re. I Can't Help Myself
13th Feb 2017 2:43am
I get the can't help yourself bout temptation but what exactly are you referring to? Becuz hey I can't help myself when it comes to eating chocolate lol
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Things I don't rather not say lol. It's not as simple as food or candy... though I do like food. Maybe it's best my temptations to others are a mystery? I think it could create mystery.
Re. I Can't Help Myself
16th Feb 2017 6:44am
You admit your limitations and flaws in this piece. You are raw, honest and vulnerable. Nice work. Good depth.
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Re. I Can't Help Myself
16th Feb 2017 6:45am
You admit your limitations and flaws in this piece. You are raw, honest and vulnerable. Nice work. Good depth.
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Re. I Can't Help Myself
16th Feb 2017 6:49pm