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Gutters and drain pipes
Stars shine
cast by gas light
a breath borne to barren brick streets
I had lit my cigarette and leaned into the lamp, another cloud floated
a lone silhouette
the obscura fixed, hugged by leather
there is no time left
sad but true I am scared
so long now it has been
with my lips pursed to open air
a still tongue kept secret without banal utterance
life by living
yet here I hold up the lamppost
~waiting~
Believing wholly to transparency
I claim dire
my person known
No question fogged by mirror
on this private lane
few come this way, though it stays open
without guard, bars or articals artificial
reasons I hand write my map
never lose them
this street stays quiet and the smoke keeps rising
I am of the ancestry
the tremors wave
my solid street
not an evening passes
wide-awake
Damned by stillness
cast by gas light
a breath borne to barren brick streets
I had lit my cigarette and leaned into the lamp, another cloud floated
a lone silhouette
the obscura fixed, hugged by leather
there is no time left
sad but true I am scared
so long now it has been
with my lips pursed to open air
a still tongue kept secret without banal utterance
life by living
yet here I hold up the lamppost
~waiting~
Believing wholly to transparency
I claim dire
my person known
No question fogged by mirror
on this private lane
few come this way, though it stays open
without guard, bars or articals artificial
reasons I hand write my map
never lose them
this street stays quiet and the smoke keeps rising
I am of the ancestry
the tremors wave
my solid street
not an evening passes
wide-awake
Damned by stillness
Written by
souladareatease
Published 19th Jan 2017
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Re. Gutters and drain pipes
This has such a depth of noir quality to it, Souled One. I actually saw a photo that captures this imagery so perfectly the man beneath the lamp is you.
And the silhouette...well, we don't know yet, do we?
Fantastic imagery and reach of both nostalgia and human emotion through that age-old demon of insomnia. Ah, but where would poetry such as this be but unseen in dreams if it didn't exist to torment the wide-awake.
And the silhouette...well, we don't know yet, do we?
Fantastic imagery and reach of both nostalgia and human emotion through that age-old demon of insomnia. Ah, but where would poetry such as this be but unseen in dreams if it didn't exist to torment the wide-awake.
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Re. Gutters and drain pipes
19th Jan 2017 9:12pm
Appreciate Your kindness AV !!!
I get on kicks for pics for a bit.
Then I like posts without them for awhile...
pics I tend to reserve for the flowery or exuberant writes....for me some pics speak louder than a Write....some writes are just humble and rather reserve
I get on kicks for pics for a bit.
Then I like posts without them for awhile...
pics I tend to reserve for the flowery or exuberant writes....for me some pics speak louder than a Write....some writes are just humble and rather reserve
Re. Gutters and drain pipes
Anonymous
19th Jan 2017 9:42pm
I feel as if I was transported to some dark ethereal world reading this. I read this with a cigarette and the cigarette burned to the nub without my hand even moving... I was just engrossed in the beauty of it.
Good god this sounds amazing when I say it out loud, the flow is just so beautiful. Literally the only thing that could make this read better is if there was a dude playing smooth jazz on a saxophone as I read.
If I had a hat, I'd tip it.
Good god this sounds amazing when I say it out loud, the flow is just so beautiful. Literally the only thing that could make this read better is if there was a dude playing smooth jazz on a saxophone as I read.
If I had a hat, I'd tip it.
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Re: Re. Gutters and drain pipes
20th Jan 2017 00:31am
What an Honour - TY for such Kindness!!! Sadly I've never had the gift for wind instruments- but to me even string-played jazz still sounds like fusion without a saxophone;) I had an uncle who played sax with soul- poor guy- I was too young to realize ...I treated him like a juke-box ...by the time I learned the value of originality within the arts - he had passed on- Appreciate You Missy!!!
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Re: Re. Gutters and drain pipes
20th Jan 2017 6:13pm
Re. Gutters and drain pipes
20th Jan 2017 4:50pm
.... a special, personal place for quiet, undisturbed contemplation, self-reflection--perhaps, by day not as 'isolated' , but in the depth of nite remains "far from the madding crowd....." When darkness descends, the crazy chaos of the day seems to 'disappear'...carried away through 'gutters and drainpipes.'
in echoing Missy's reaction, i too feel that this piece conveys a certain surreal quality ...in fact, while reading, i could visualize a darker mist melding with the (your??) cigarette smoke...rising and writhing as a sort of ominous wraith...an omen.....to this lone narrator/poet..
Anyhow, you create such vivid imagery within your lines....it stirs the ( my) imagination. This one continues to haunt my thoughts....definitely a memorable one, mo chara!
in echoing Missy's reaction, i too feel that this piece conveys a certain surreal quality ...in fact, while reading, i could visualize a darker mist melding with the (your??) cigarette smoke...rising and writhing as a sort of ominous wraith...an omen.....to this lone narrator/poet..
Anyhow, you create such vivid imagery within your lines....it stirs the ( my) imagination. This one continues to haunt my thoughts....definitely a memorable one, mo chara!
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Re: Re. Gutters and drain pipes
20th Jan 2017 6:18pm
Speaking of those who are too good to me- Thank You for such a glowing comment!!! Not so much an omen as it is a part of me -one of my ways of signal....and in equal manner the way it can be backdraft....hearts on sleeves Kidd-O I know no other way to be lol
Re. Gutters and drain pipes
Anonymous
21st Jan 2017 5:50am
...well you already know how i feel about this poem :)
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Re: Re. Gutters and drain pipes
21st Jan 2017 5:51am
Re. Gutters and drain pipes
23rd Jan 2017 10:09pm
Soul, My first odd impression...perhaps minor epiphany was that indeed stars are big, brilliant gas-lights.
I am touched by this passage:
"so long now it has been
with my lips pursed to open air
a still tongue kept secret without banal utterance"
It makes me ponder how often I open my mouth or charge my pen with banal utterances and it makes me remember those in my life who do only speak when they have something significant to say..
And this stanza is on point with my desire to be authentic, to present to both myself and others my genuine self:
"Believing wholly to transparency
I claim dire
my person known
No question fogged by mirror "
I am well fed by this piece. Bravo!
I am touched by this passage:
"so long now it has been
with my lips pursed to open air
a still tongue kept secret without banal utterance"
It makes me ponder how often I open my mouth or charge my pen with banal utterances and it makes me remember those in my life who do only speak when they have something significant to say..
And this stanza is on point with my desire to be authentic, to present to both myself and others my genuine self:
"Believing wholly to transparency
I claim dire
my person known
No question fogged by mirror "
I am well fed by this piece. Bravo!
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Re: Re. Gutters and drain pipes
25th Jan 2017 7:15pm
Perceptive-The Appreciation for that is endless Good Sir!!! The world is loud with fodder...being known or rather understood is a life's work for the worthy...(and i must confess...the ego) Your time is valued!!!
Re. Gutters and drain pipes
Anonymous
8th Feb 2017 6:09pm
Your talent is so very exquisite.
Enchanting journey of the soul.
Beautiful ....
Enchanting journey of the soul.
Beautiful ....
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