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Insinuated maybe's
"I wonder
yeah I wonder
why so many insects would rather feed off the dead"~Jello
Intimate whispers
encircled
we clasp bone deep
tied together
strung
kites by tethered string
how conditioned
such gilded doors
swing
this hinge to open air
"Jimmy through your locked front doors
rifle through your sacred drawers
line my pockets, deface your dreams
till the cows come home to me
all for me"~Jello
yeah I wonder
why so many insects would rather feed off the dead"~Jello
Intimate whispers
encircled
we clasp bone deep
tied together
strung
kites by tethered string
how conditioned
such gilded doors
swing
this hinge to open air
"Jimmy through your locked front doors
rifle through your sacred drawers
line my pockets, deface your dreams
till the cows come home to me
all for me"~Jello
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Re. Insinuated maybe's
11th Jan 2017 10:07pm
Before even looking at the final lines I was thinking of a metaphor for the human condition. While labeling this write as "anger", you leave enough space for the reader to imagine a plethora of conclusions.
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Re: Re. Insinuated maybe's
12th Jan 2017 7:14pm
Appreciate You coming by Jazz!!!
"Anger" is a bit strong- but there isn't a "frustration" label lol
"Anger" is a bit strong- but there isn't a "frustration" label lol
Re. Insinuated maybe's
This is mindbogglingly to me. I can't seem to make heads nor tails of it in relation to anger. The opening and closing stanzas are quotes? Or is "Jello" some type of sarcasm I'm not connecting? The middle stanzas seem so intimate and soft in conjunct with the outer's bolded font. Like it was swallowed up, or something lost in the middle somewhere. And maybe that's the point - things that are lost in translation or middle ground.
Overall I couldn't stop reading this in attempts to understand it. Aside from the title, I couldn't reconcile it to anger at all. On the contrary, it seemed a complete contradiction in and of itself. I haven't been boggled by something like this in a long time. It's like a literary puzzle.
Thanks for the read.
Overall I couldn't stop reading this in attempts to understand it. Aside from the title, I couldn't reconcile it to anger at all. On the contrary, it seemed a complete contradiction in and of itself. I haven't been boggled by something like this in a long time. It's like a literary puzzle.
Thanks for the read.
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Re: Re. Insinuated maybe's
12th Jan 2017 7:18pm
Hey there AV,
yes- label this "frustration" lol
This was Writ for Anons bi-polar comp.
hence the knee-jerk differences :)
Jello- is a singer*
Always Appreciate Your time and read!!!
yes- label this "frustration" lol
This was Writ for Anons bi-polar comp.
hence the knee-jerk differences :)
Jello- is a singer*
Always Appreciate Your time and read!!!
Re: Re. Insinuated maybe's
12th Jan 2017 7:24pm
Re. Insinuated maybe's
12th Jan 2017 00:19am
Wellll.....now, mo chara....i would much rather be spending moments of serenity with this poet---sharing those "intimate whispers" as "kites tied together.." on a "tethered string" in favor of ones that seem to be filled with anger....
( As in..remind me never to upset this person...or to at least purchase a more secure locking system for my inner self......(lol!!) :p I mean.....tossing a person's "sacred drawers"... daring to touch their ' treasures ' ....REALLY?!?!...(.grins and giggles )
Anyhow....i do enjoy how this piece takes my mind on a roller coaster ride through its emotional lows and highs....even if i have totally misinterpreted your intended meaning :)
( As in..remind me never to upset this person...or to at least purchase a more secure locking system for my inner self......(lol!!) :p I mean.....tossing a person's "sacred drawers"... daring to touch their ' treasures ' ....REALLY?!?!...(.grins and giggles )
Anyhow....i do enjoy how this piece takes my mind on a roller coaster ride through its emotional lows and highs....even if i have totally misinterpreted your intended meaning :)
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Re. Insinuated maybe's
12th Jan 2017 7:31pm
Hey there Kidd-O thank You for delving into this little Write!!!
Being written for the bi-polar comp, I've known a few folks with this problem....it can be frustrating for the person or people who experience it.
It is a thief for true happiness or hinders the ability to me still within head and heart.
It can exploit what at sometimes isseen as sacred and private and in the next breath say fuck-it!!!
Hehehe - it takes mucho-much to make my anger truly rise.
Frustration though- that is common-place.
Mis-interpretation through life is usually the cause of communication breakdown.
Whaddya-do?- Observe, learn- but live!!!
Being written for the bi-polar comp, I've known a few folks with this problem....it can be frustrating for the person or people who experience it.
It is a thief for true happiness or hinders the ability to me still within head and heart.
It can exploit what at sometimes isseen as sacred and private and in the next breath say fuck-it!!!
Hehehe - it takes mucho-much to make my anger truly rise.
Frustration though- that is common-place.
Mis-interpretation through life is usually the cause of communication breakdown.
Whaddya-do?- Observe, learn- but live!!!
Re. Insinuated maybe's
wise poetic words in self talk and expression
It impress me with its vagueness and make my mind think hard to get it but that's why it's a beautiful piece
love n respect
It impress me with its vagueness and make my mind think hard to get it but that's why it's a beautiful piece
love n respect
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Re: Re. Insinuated maybe's
16th Jan 2017 2:22pm
Thank You for Your Kindness Kidd-O !!!
Sometimes I just stick with the simplistic lol (make that....most of the time :) )
Sometimes I just stick with the simplistic lol (make that....most of the time :) )
Re. Insinuated maybe's
16th Jan 2017 7:57am
Been a long time, my friend. Glad to see you are still stringing together those lovely images. Be well, Soulman !
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Re: Re. Insinuated maybe's
16th Jan 2017 2:18pm
Hey there cool breeze good to see Ya!!!
Tis been way too long- appreciate You swinging by!!!
Tis been way too long- appreciate You swinging by!!!
Re. Insinuated maybe's
23rd Jan 2017 10:24pm
Soul, Okay so I'm mystified by the "Jello" part. But I identify well with the final stanza. The erosion of our privacy and the trampling of our sacred things is appalling in today's society and so plainly driven by egomaniacal avarice. But I also shudder at the amount of myself that I have willingly rendered to public view. You sir make me think..an activity that, for me, can at times be dangerous. Bravo!
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Re. Insinuated maybe's
25th Jan 2017 7:10pm
Jello1...Mob mentality for feeding frenzy to that which can no longer fight.
The simplicity of it. like a side-show attraction or kicking a dog when they are down.
Tie in what You have perceived and place it as well to the way Bi-polar syndromes affect the self with whiplash
actions and question resulting in mirror fashion to those within it's sphere of influence.
I really appreciate You taking the time to truly analyze and soak in the deeper meanings...a fave. way of my style is for many multiple meanings.
The simplicity of it. like a side-show attraction or kicking a dog when they are down.
Tie in what You have perceived and place it as well to the way Bi-polar syndromes affect the self with whiplash
actions and question resulting in mirror fashion to those within it's sphere of influence.
I really appreciate You taking the time to truly analyze and soak in the deeper meanings...a fave. way of my style is for many multiple meanings.
Re. Insinuated maybe's
Anonymous
- Edited 28th Feb 2017 5:55am
28th Feb 2017 5:54am
I despise those little insuated maybes. Light me on fire dear sir!
Bring the , bring the torch ha!
Bring the , bring the torch ha!

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Re: Re. Insinuated maybe's
1st Mar 2017 1:16am
Thank You for dropping by Spilt-Good to see a new face!!! I will catch You around town!!!