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SATURN: the Lovers
He'd observed her since late Autumn,
Wanting to bide his earthly time,
Until the skies mixed their pallet
With the pastels of a Spring rhyme.
Banking off the rings of Saturn,
She came to him in Winter's cold
When the air made his blue eyes turn,
The taste of her would make him bold.
She laid on his snow-covered soil
As naked as the leafless trees.
And as their joined bodies would coil,
Their flame made horizons unfreeze.
Unlike the lethargy of Summer,
When the ripples of mirage heat
Make it impossible to think
While drunk on the sweat off a peach.
Of her, finds himself wishing for
A fifth season, could it exist?
A timelessness of perfect storm,
For she whom he cannot resist.
And won't want to for all his will,
The numbing of body & mind.
But doesn't notice Winter's chill,
He'll keep her from Spring's thaw to find.
Published 23rd Dec 2016
| Edited 28th Jun 2017
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23rd Dec 2016 5:44am
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23rd Dec 2016 9:05am
23rd Dec 2016 4:44pm
With trembling thanks to you, dear Kasai, who's own elegance of presence honors me so.💫
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23rd Dec 2016 11:18am
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24th Dec 2016 4:21am
Aaah Melia, my Celestial sister, thank you for your galactic insight, your embrace, and for a place of honor on your RL.
xo
xo
23rd Dec 2016 7:56pm
Love is never on time nor orchestrated by our own hand -
but can come as the Winter storm freezing our sensibilities
while thawing our resolve at the same time.
Wonderful entry, Jade. Best of in the comp.
but can come as the Winter storm freezing our sensibilities
while thawing our resolve at the same time.
Wonderful entry, Jade. Best of in the comp.
24th Dec 2016 4:30am
My thanks, dear Ahavati. What a wonderful swirling description of the natural order of Love's pull no matter the circumstances.🔥
And thank you for your good wishes.✨
And thank you for your good wishes.✨
24th Dec 2016 1:18pm
wonderous and sensual - wishing for that fifth season as well...
excellent write, dear jade
excellent write, dear jade
25th Dec 2016 4:54am
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3rd Jul 2017 6:31pm
the rhythm feels a bit rough in a few places. I like your extended personification of seasons, even placing them within a romance.
