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Demons Within
Immured within walls of flesh and bone
It raves, rages, and craves
Screaming and scratching at the halls of its home
A beast wide awake…
Caged
Sullen, stretched, starved, segregated, separated
Inimically Isolated
Cravings curbed by its captor
The damned demons’ desires deserted
While its captor awaits impatiently for the rapture
Capitulation surely could be reverted
Undetermined
Wait, work, wonder, wish, wail
To no avail
The beast which resides inside calls and cries
All of which die on deaf ears
Captor can’t wait until the beast dies
The beast curses its captor and his fears
A once unified mind
Torn asunder
Benevolent and benign
Dragged down under
Insane
Beaten, bent, battered, bruised, broken
Ripped open
It raves, rages, and craves
Screaming and scratching at the halls of its home
A beast wide awake…
Caged
Sullen, stretched, starved, segregated, separated
Inimically Isolated
Cravings curbed by its captor
The damned demons’ desires deserted
While its captor awaits impatiently for the rapture
Capitulation surely could be reverted
Undetermined
Wait, work, wonder, wish, wail
To no avail
The beast which resides inside calls and cries
All of which die on deaf ears
Captor can’t wait until the beast dies
The beast curses its captor and his fears
A once unified mind
Torn asunder
Benevolent and benign
Dragged down under
Insane
Beaten, bent, battered, bruised, broken
Ripped open
Written by
Chaoticwayz
Published 5th Dec 2016
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Re. Demons Within
5th Dec 2016 2:48am
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Re. Demons Within
5th Dec 2016 4:09am
totally agree with MrBuchanan...
yep...everything he said is on point.
and i would also add format...all 10's bro
yep...everything he said is on point.
and i would also add format...all 10's bro
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Re: Re. Demons Within
5th Dec 2016 4:13am
Nice! That's what's up. Thanks for the feedback man! My growth and development seem to be there. That's what I'm looking for.
Re. Demons Within
5th Dec 2016 4:33am
Made my stomach churn, been here a long time, huh?
centre'stood
-Howlings
centre'stood
-Howlings
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Re: Re. Demons Within
5th Dec 2016 4:38am
Yes indeed. It's been a perilous journey. And it's not over yet. I'm eternally grateful for your read and feedback. It goes along way. Thank you.
Re. Demons Within
5th Dec 2016 11:23am
Brilliantly descriptive and beautifully written so that the audience can't help but connect with the rawness, the pain, the fragile and so on...
At least here amongst other like minded people the beast need not be caged, your beauty shines immensely through your writing...and not all ears are deaf my friend ;) 💜
At least here amongst other like minded people the beast need not be caged, your beauty shines immensely through your writing...and not all ears are deaf my friend ;) 💜
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Re: Re. Demons Within
5th Dec 2016 12:22pm
Yes indeed, and what a refreshing place to be, here among peers, who understand me. Thank you eternally!!
Re. Demons Within
5th Dec 2016 11:46am
Chaotic one I felt this write deep I too have demons within that I cage and starve.. well not always sometimes I cave and feed them.. this is a superb write.. wicked, chilling and compelling.. damn it man you have skills!!!
love Crim
love Crim
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Re: Re. Demons Within
5th Dec 2016 12:23pm
Such wonderful feedback Crim! Thank you so much! It's great to have a place where the demons can be released and run free!
Re. Demons Within
6th Dec 2016 11:26pm
A very relatable piece, each of us with our own demons to contain, some of them louder than others, never content unless they are constantly rattling the cage...
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Re: Re. Demons Within
6th Dec 2016 11:35pm
I agree, and that's part of what I love about this general topic. Everyone can connect in their own way. Thanks for the feedback Kas! ;)
Re. Demons Within
8th Dec 2016 00:38am
I kept catching myself looking over my shoulder reading this one. But these are demons one can't outrun, aren't they? Great write! :)
Willow
Willow
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8th Dec 2016 2:31am
Nope. Can't outrun them, just gotta turn and face them head on! Lol. thanks for the feedback Willow! :)
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Re. Demons Within
21st Dec 2017 9:07am
Great flow and understanding of the binding between words, the internal morphed into animal form I really enjoyed also. Write on.
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