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Pompeii
Imagine a small planet on fire
Two steps from the edge of the universe
Watch it now, as the flames tickle higher
Today the volcano is at her worst
Billowing smoke to clothe her dignity
Can you hear her throat bubble with laughter?
Below, a multitude of ants all flee
Others wait in their homes for the slaughter
Praying to Mars, the god of war and blood
But their cries will go out in vain today
For now here comes the fiery flood
To wash the pathos of before away
From the ashes, a wave of chaos born
Hollow statues cower against the morn
Two steps from the edge of the universe
Watch it now, as the flames tickle higher
Today the volcano is at her worst
Billowing smoke to clothe her dignity
Can you hear her throat bubble with laughter?
Below, a multitude of ants all flee
Others wait in their homes for the slaughter
Praying to Mars, the god of war and blood
But their cries will go out in vain today
For now here comes the fiery flood
To wash the pathos of before away
From the ashes, a wave of chaos born
Hollow statues cower against the morn
Published 2nd Nov 2016
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2nd Nov 2016 10:42pm
OMW!
Where to start with you Miss Luna?
Your choice of topic is magnificent, I am so pleased you used the place as a title because it brings that Volcanic eruption alive just by how the page sits. 79AD apparently was the worst of those volcanic eruptions. Beautiful choice of topic & I'm so glad you kept it short; it ads to the poem.
That opening line is a wonderful image and dare I say the perfect image, I have never been near an erupting volcano, but I'd imagine a small planet on fire.
I also loved the image of her throat bubbling with laughter... Exceptional!
Your description of the people of Pompeii is stunning "ants" "slaughter" "god of war & blood" "fiery flood" vivid images packed one behind another.
If it was my poem I'd swop the last two lines around.. The first line is rough and raw. Brilliant!
Just wonderful!
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Where to start with you Miss Luna?
Your choice of topic is magnificent, I am so pleased you used the place as a title because it brings that Volcanic eruption alive just by how the page sits. 79AD apparently was the worst of those volcanic eruptions. Beautiful choice of topic & I'm so glad you kept it short; it ads to the poem.
That opening line is a wonderful image and dare I say the perfect image, I have never been near an erupting volcano, but I'd imagine a small planet on fire.
I also loved the image of her throat bubbling with laughter... Exceptional!
Your description of the people of Pompeii is stunning "ants" "slaughter" "god of war & blood" "fiery flood" vivid images packed one behind another.
If it was my poem I'd swop the last two lines around.. The first line is rough and raw. Brilliant!
Just wonderful!
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5th Nov 2016 5:52pm
This is a beautifully written and thought out piece. The imagery really comes across (strongly and alive) in this piece. Welcome to DUP
