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Carrot and Cuke
Carrot and cuke argued one night
Which provided the greatest delight
It wasn't nutrition
Backed their position
But whether the lady was tight
Which provided the greatest delight
It wasn't nutrition
Backed their position
But whether the lady was tight
Published 3rd Aug 2011
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The only line I had a problem with was "Backed their position", I understand what you mean by it but it just feels a little forced and unnatural, the way it stands currently.
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