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think you know me?
melancholy is my covering
varying shades of black
think you know me?
you don't.
it's my fault you assume i'm shallow as a puddle
that's been pissed in by some vagrant
I'm the moon casting light
on her Earth bound children
the stars chasing each other
across the night sky
I'm an enigma
wrapped in a riddle
I am beautiful.
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Re. think you know me?
30th Sep 2016 2:00pm
Re: Re. think you know me?
1st Oct 2016 00:11am
Re. think you know me?
My cousin started a facebook hashtag
#Iamsomebody
This reminded me of that and his reasons why.
Blue Skies @ You
Al-x-
#Iamsomebody
This reminded me of that and his reasons why.
Blue Skies @ You
Al-x-
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Re: Re. think you know me?
1st Oct 2016 00:11am
Re. think you know me?
30th Sep 2016 3:01pm
Love this powerful side of yours, to me it reads like a redemption poem...
Great ink, dear Crim!
Love, Duende
Great ink, dear Crim!
Love, Duende
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Re: Re. think you know me?
1st Oct 2016 00:12am
Re. think you know me?
30th Sep 2016 3:28pm
Many don’t stop to consider that we are all people with many aspects to us and lots of depth. Stay secure in who you are.
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Re: Re. think you know me?
1st Oct 2016 00:13am
Re. think you know me?
30th Sep 2016 5:40pm
Now there's a power song! I'm loving the strength in this, my lady! You ARE beautiful! :)
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Re: Re. think you know me?
1st Oct 2016 00:14am
thank you most graciously lovely Willow you're a true beauty yourself..
love Crim
love Crim
Re. think you know me?
30th Sep 2016 5:55pm
Can't agree more with that last line. I think your work contains clues but the real Crim does remain an enigma. Your writes are a powerful mix of fantasy and experience seems to me. One thrills, and the other instructs. Always a pleasure Lady Crim!
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Re: Re. think you know me?
1st Oct 2016 00:15am
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Anonymous
30th Sep 2016 6:38pm
You're beauty, personified. Never have I laid eyes upon you, malady. I don't have to. Your quill is everything you teach about heart ,soul, mind, body, spirit, heartache, evils of evil. Love, loved, lover. I thank you. Judgment in my experience. Is always from someone, who never looks within. But, spouts off without being a human. Love you dear.
✨Always peace Trish
✨Always peace Trish
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Re: Re. think you know me?
1st Oct 2016 00:16am
aw lovely Trish how deeply you've touched my heart with your love and compassion you are so beautiful yourself..
love Brenda
love Brenda
Re. think you know me?
30th Sep 2016 9:28pm
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1st Oct 2016 00:16am
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Re: Re. think you know me?
1st Oct 2016 4:21am
interesting question posed Todski i'll let you know when I myself crack the code..
thank you my friend..
love Brenda
thank you my friend..
love Brenda
Re. think you know me?
1st Oct 2016 8:31am
Shades of black are made up of so many colors,all of them beautiful. Your poetry is just that way,Crimsin,beautiful....
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Re: Re. think you know me?
2nd Oct 2016 11:35am
Re. think you know me?
1st Oct 2016 8:50am
definitely beautiful, Crim.
it's a woman, lusty & daring in poetry, & it's enough...
it's a woman, lusty & daring in poetry, & it's enough...
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Re: Re. think you know me?
2nd Oct 2016 11:36am
Re. think you know me?
1st Oct 2016 7:55pm
The last two verses are too simplistic and explanatory, especially when the previous verses are so absolutely perfect, "the stars chasing each other/across the night sky" (while not exactly an original image) providing the perfect ending. The desire to simplify and explain is the curse of all poets at some point. Other than that, this is a very neat piece. Thank you for the read, and all critique is, of course, JMHO. - Jack xxx
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Re: Re. think you know me?
2nd Oct 2016 11:37am
thank you Jack yeah I kind of always overdo things deeply appreciate the critique and read..
love Brenda
love Brenda
Re. think you know me?
Anonymous
1st Oct 2016 10:42pm
My Beautiful Brenda, if one cares to look close enough, they can see that you are embracing every facet of life which you have experienced...a sign of such strength in my opinion....you are one of the strongest people I know and I am honored...to the ones who can't see who you are or pass judgement, they're not even worth placing thought...except to feel sad for them. I loved this and I love you very much...
xoxoxo Taryn
xoxoxo Taryn
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Re: Re. think you know me?
2nd Oct 2016 11:39am
thank you my beautiful one I can always count on you to understand me and where i'm coming from love you lady :)
xo Brenda
xo Brenda
Re. think you know me?
2nd Oct 2016 10:55pm
The thoughts that others think are raindrops on a sandy beach that disappear the moment hey land and sink slowly in a salty ocean. They know nothing of the beauty that is you...
JJ
JJ
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Re: Re. think you know me?
3rd Oct 2016 1:26am
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Anonymous
3rd Oct 2016 9:42pm
Yes you are beautiful.. Brenda!! i loved this ink.. love you!!
Dave
Dave
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Re: Re. think you know me?
6th Oct 2016 5:56pm
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Anonymous
3rd Jan 2017 4:52am
Hey Crim......not sure how I missed this outstanding ink.......I might not know you well as we all change daily.......I know this though......you're a beautiful soul inside and out......each of your writes tell something of your beauty.......purple luv & hugs xo :)
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3rd Jan 2017 5:01am