Lonely Piano

oh my beautiful Duende this write in a stunner.. so full of passion..

love Crim

Thank you so much, dear Crim!

You made me smile with your comment :-)

Love, Duende

This is such a visually beautiful scene. So melancholy and lovely.

Thank you so much!  
 
I really appreciate your comment!

I'm not sure if the image inspired you or if you wrote the poem first and found a complimentary image but....Wow! It was perfect! The picture to me was the focal point. It's imagery was just that powerful and telling. The ink actually framed and matted the story! A lovely story I might add... Good luck in comp.

Thank you so much, dear Rain!

Well... a picture inspired the poem, but not this picture! The host gave 12 pictures to choose from and a picture of keys covered in dust inspired this piece! In the end I wanted another one and all of a sudden I remembered having this one on my computer... I thought it suited perfectly and I'm glad you agree :-)

*Oh, my* ... Two things I admire about his piece:  One, the lament, the sound of one key within a constant tear drop; two, the ending ... *whoa!* ... just fucking *whoa!* ... love to you, Beautiful and this piano piece ... ~Devlin.

Lady Devlin, thank you so much!

You make me smile big time with your enthusiasm and your beautiful words... the sound of one key within a constant tear drop, now that is whoa :-)
So glad to hear you loved the ending!

Love to you...
Duende

Thank you so much Todski, for calling this piece gorgeous!  
 
I appreciate your feedback! I wrote it that way because first: I wanted the 'everyone' to stand out and second: the shape!  
I still find it hard to let that go and I don't see that happening in the near future as well ;-)  
 
Having said that... I agree with you that putting 'everyone left' on one line, gives it more punch (learned that word from you) and I came up with this solution, which will leave the shape in tact! What do you think?  
 
everyone left  
 
now I’m by  
myself in this  
forsaken place

I had the same hang-up on that section.

I think your solution works well with the desire to clarify your thought and keep your shape intact.


Overall, this is an effective use of metaphor to communicate solitude and longing.

You are both so sharp ;-)

I edited my poem 1 second before you shared your view!!!

Thank you mariekeys, I appreciate your comments and thoughts so much!

what a lovely entry.Duende.
such longing in these words..
and the pic suits this so so well..

Thank you so much, Naajir!

I already had the feeling you would love this one ;-)
Glad to hear you did and that you think the picture suits!

"....my soundboard  
is silenced I need  
your hands to bring  
back to life my music "

The thing that jumps out at me as a reader first is your mastery of the vernacular. The intelligent use of vocabulary as you weave a fabric of elegant words makes this an attractive write indeed.  You write with such depth, such feeling.  I hope that whomever judges this can see as I do how deeply personal this ink is as they make a choice.  This is simply stunning Duende.....

.....and I'm stealing your image too.  Fantastic !

https://youtu.be/H7u5GtSIC5k

Thank you so much, MrM!

You write with such depth, such feeling > this is by far the most beautiful compliment you (or anyone else) can give me! This piece is indeed very personal and vulnerable and though I didn't win the competition I am proud of this one and that's the greatest price :-)

Glad you love the picture, it's one of my favorites!

Thank you for the music :-)

Absolutely breathtaking. 💓
I adore everything about this write.
The imagery is so very potent, the expression is flawless, and the aching emotion is so very intense.
The pic truly brings it all to life.

Well done.

Wow, what an amazing comment, lovely Heart ♥

Thank you for your enthusiasm and the wonderful compliments!
I appreciate your visits so much!

Ok, I'm just going to combine everyone's
comment and then taper them into
one word or maybe two..  .

Excellence,

I absolutely love streaming ponder here.



-Howlings

Excellence? I can't ask for a better compliment :-)

Thank you so much, Howlings!
I truly appreciate your visits and your amazing comments!!!

This has such a loneliness to it. Beautifully described ^^
Awesome as always :-)

Thank you so much, DC!
I appreciate your words... always!

Don't Abandon Me asked for something very lonely...

Duende, hauntingly beautiful to coin a phrase, causing me to want to scoop "you" up and dust "you" off to reveal the beauty that is "you"...loneliness dissipates when one is happy living with just themselves...at least I think so...gorgeous write...good luck in the comp!

With love - Taryn xoxo

Thank you so much for your heartwarming comment, Taryn!  
 
You put a smile on my face :-)  
Most of the time I'm happy living by myself, but there is always this longing... well, you understand longing ;-)  
 
Love, Duende

Love the piano imagery and metaphor in this awesome piece!  
Makes me want to go to my living room and makes some noise on my keyboard...  
You've inspired a new poem...  
"Grand Scales"  

https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/494512-grand-scales/

JJ

Thank you so much for calling this piece awesome!!!

I feel very honored that I inspired a new poem :-)

Thank you, JJ

Thank you so much, Boian!

Great to hear you thought the last stanza nails the feel :-)

This is a lovely little piece it's gorgeous

Thank you so much!

Gorgeous... I can't ask for a better compliment :-)

Fine work Duende.  The piano is a difficult instrument to play but so rewarding.  Mind if I try some "Moonlight Sonata"?

Thank you so much for your comment!

Moonlight Sonata?
That's an offer I can't refuse!

Exceptional in content n depth...
perfect pic. Compliment to the ink.

Wow... what an amazing comment!
Exceptional... I can't ask for a better compliment!

Thank you so much, Poetik!

Hey Duende.....this outstanding all the way around.......I'm speechless actually......glad I read this......purple luv & hugs xo :)

Wow, flowergirl...

I'm really honored by your comment!
Leaving someone speechless
is... a great compliment

Thank you so much!
Love, Duende