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What the hell?? [My face is leaking]
It’s been a long time since my eyes were too welled up to see.
Not feeling bad has been quite good, but didn’t feel like me.
I thought that I could fix our love; for months and months I’ve tried,
But now I see it’s not just me and something’s truly died.
That discontentment that I feel; it’s not just mine alone,
For there are aspects of myself for which I can’t atone.
I am the creature that I am, which isn’t quite enough -
You need someone to make life smooth instead of always rough.
I guess we’ve had our “better” years, and now we’re into “worse”.
And though we keep our promises, they feel more like a curse.
So here I lie with streaming eyes, a once-familiar place.
It’s been so long, it’s kind of strange, this water on my face.
Suddenly, I feel again; I think my heart is broken,
For though your words were civil, lips and eyes have clearly spoken.
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Re: Re. What the hell?? [My face is leaking]
28th Sep 2016 5:51pm
Re. What the hell?? [My face is leaking]
28th Sep 2016 3:39pm
Unfortunately... or fortunately... when we stop wrestling with the truth... The truth remains, plain as day, in our face willing to be calmly reckoned with as it was to be wrestled... damn it!
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Re: Re. What the hell?? [My face is leaking]
28th Sep 2016 5:55pm
Yeah. I guess so. Shit.
Holding to the hope that this is a season and will change, as seasons do....
Holding to the hope that this is a season and will change, as seasons do....
Re. What the hell?? [My face is leaking]
28th Sep 2016 5:46pm
I think your leaky eye syndrome is contagious. I can feel the sinking in my gut. I think you ascribed to yourself too much blame. You are enough. Sad, beautiful write. Brava!
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Re: Re. What the hell?? [My face is leaking]
28th Sep 2016 5:58pm
Re. What the hell?? [My face is leaking]
28th Sep 2016 9:00pm
Re: Re. What the hell?? [My face is leaking]
29th Sep 2016 4:50am
Re. What the hell?? [My face is leaking]
28th Sep 2016 9:05pm
I'm feeling this one. I've been there doll and not that long ago. It's possible to come out the other side of that tunnel better than you went in, not easy, but possible. :Hugs:
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Re: Re. What the hell?? [My face is leaking]
29th Sep 2016 4:51am
Many thanks - your encouragement is much appreciated. I think we can make it....
Re. What the hell?? [My face is leaking]
Oh my, this was penned so well, brokent. The emotions leaped from the page and crashed against my skin. I know the pain of trying to mend something beautiful, trying to repair what's been broken, but the rifts are many, the disfigurement is inevitable and there is only so much we can do to smooth the cracks that are embedded in the core. xo
#hugs&kisses
#hugs&kisses
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Re: Re. What the hell?? [My face is leaking]
29th Sep 2016 4:55am
Well, thank you, Rain! Glad I was able to convey the feeling. And thanks for your kind support. :)
Re. What the hell?? [My face is leaking]
29th Sep 2016 3:13am
It's always what's not said, isn't it?
This read very well. Good rhythm and rhyme.
This read very well. Good rhythm and rhyme.
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Re: Re. What the hell?? [My face is leaking]
29th Sep 2016 4:59am
Thank you - it was a good day for rhymes! (Some days - not so much) Sometimes focusing on the challenge of putting my words into poetic form helps to lessen the sting of the meaning a bit. If that makes sense....