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Madonna
Painting by Edvard Munich
Madonna
each morning I get up early
just to feel the meadow cry
her tears crushed beneath my feet
sometimes I cry with her
though meek are my offerings
I offer my breasts as vessels
as a mother should
a butterfly studies the freckles upon them
she's chased away by a honeybee
but there is no nectar to bleed
I brush my fingers against a surly old tree
for he has dropped so many of his little chandeliers
I pick up the thorny brown hives
and inhale their wet mint
my lungs coated with the musk of eucalyptus
each evening before I retire to his bed
I linger in the meadow just to feel her cry
her sun is leaving after another day's work
the silver haired one slips between the sheets
though meek are my offerings
Madonna
each morning I get up early
just to feel the meadow cry
her tears crushed beneath my feet
sometimes I cry with her
though meek are my offerings
I offer my breasts as vessels
as a mother should
a butterfly studies the freckles upon them
she's chased away by a honeybee
but there is no nectar to bleed
I brush my fingers against a surly old tree
for he has dropped so many of his little chandeliers
I pick up the thorny brown hives
and inhale their wet mint
my lungs coated with the musk of eucalyptus
each evening before I retire to his bed
I linger in the meadow just to feel her cry
her sun is leaving after another day's work
the silver haired one slips between the sheets
though meek are my offerings
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Re. Madonna
Lobo so nourishing is your ink to a poetic soul phening for true artistic beauty..
love and respect Crim
love and respect Crim
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8th Aug 2016 5:42am
Thank you for reading and your heartfelt comment ... It's much appreciated Crim
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Anonymous
8th Aug 2016 4:51am
Thanks again my friend.
Trisha
Trisha
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8th Aug 2016 5:43am
No, I should be thanking you for the RL add ... I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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8th Aug 2016 7:47am
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8th Aug 2016 10:56pm
I wrote this for a DUP competition ... The true beauty is in the work of the artist Edvard Munich
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Re: Re. Madonna
8th Aug 2016 10:58pm
I tired writing it from the perspective of the muse, in the first person ... I feel the poem would be more intimate as such. Hope that helps.
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8th Aug 2016 9:42am
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8th Aug 2016 10:56pm
Elario ... Thank you for highlighting that line ... I'm now thinking of reworking it to either "any woman" or "any lover" or "muse" ... ?
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8th Aug 2016 1:08pm
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8th Aug 2016 10:53pm
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Well Lo...as you know I RL it without making a comment because I needed to read it a few times to take in the many layers that were speaking to me...
todski28 talks about the confusion and the pull of the emotional strings and it was the same for me...
I'm seeing the beauty of the muse and her inner and outer connection with nature but I'm also seeing the crone interwoven through it all and the third stanza is highly erotic for me...well done my friend...a worthy winner has presented itself for Edvard Munch competition... :-)
todski28 talks about the confusion and the pull of the emotional strings and it was the same for me...
I'm seeing the beauty of the muse and her inner and outer connection with nature but I'm also seeing the crone interwoven through it all and the third stanza is highly erotic for me...well done my friend...a worthy winner has presented itself for Edvard Munch competition... :-)
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10th Aug 2016 11:59am
I'm especially happy you enjoyed the natural beauty I was trying to convey ... Locked somewhere in this hodge podge of a mind of mine are your wonderful writes describing your life amongest the trees and snakes, so again I love that you felt the tenderness in this
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You lend
such provacative tenderness here.
enmeshed sensuality strums
deeply.
and iits spiritually evoking,
something needed.
-Howlings
such provacative tenderness here.
enmeshed sensuality strums
deeply.
and iits spiritually evoking,
something needed.
-Howlings
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Re: Re. Madonna
10th Aug 2016 11:55am
Thank you for your insight ... I definitely wanted to capture the sensuality of dawn through her laced with her own regrets
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9th Aug 2016 3:25pm
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10th Aug 2016 11:53am
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10th Aug 2016 6:50pm
Genius in how you flipped the angle here my brotha..
Just a genuine appreciation for the dare of it all.
Translated with sheer eloquence
That evokes a deep sense of empathy. .
Just a genuine appreciation for the dare of it all.
Translated with sheer eloquence
That evokes a deep sense of empathy. .
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Re. Madonna
13th Aug 2016 10:54pm
glorious ekphrasis.
your poem is the most bountiful expression,
such that we hope nothing else is ever written about this painting...
your poem is the most bountiful expression,
such that we hope nothing else is ever written about this painting...
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14th Aug 2016 8:34pm
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17th Aug 2016 10:33am
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5th Sep 2016 7:39am
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5th Sep 2016 4:52pm
Thank you Tony, I greatly appreciate the read and comment ... Hope you're enjoying the holiday weekend.
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13th Sep 2016 11:46am
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29th Sep 2016 10:34pm
My gawd! This---> "I brush my fingers against a surly old tree
for he has dropped so many of his little chandeliers
I pick up the thorny brown hives
and inhale their wet mint
my lungs coated with the musk of eucalyptus" <---this is incredible!
Goodness, your pen's tongue is charmingly sexy...
for he has dropped so many of his little chandeliers
I pick up the thorny brown hives
and inhale their wet mint
my lungs coated with the musk of eucalyptus" <---this is incredible!
Goodness, your pen's tongue is charmingly sexy...
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30th Sep 2016 7:36am
The thing I liked best about writing this was writing from perspective of the muse in the painting ... I think, even more so than acting, writing allows one to slip into so many skins, to see and reflect on the world from another perch.
Charmingly sexy ... ? You're making me blush lol
Charmingly sexy ... ? You're making me blush lol