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a hundred thousand times - a Ghazal
yes my dear, I did miss you, a hundred thousand times
happily, i will forgive, your hundred thousand crimes
free verse if, they say today, the only way to go
disobey, I will write you, a hundred thousand rhymes
my world is, but silent, in middle of a desert
the breezes dear, bring with you, a hundred thousand chimes
even if dear, we are split, with mountains in between
will take on, my dear for you, a hundred thousand climbs
let them come, and rip my tongue, or sew up both my lips
will still convey, I love you, a hundred thousand mimes
yes my dear, I did miss you, a hundred thousand times
happily, i will forgive, your hundred thousand crimes
© KDAmB 2016. All rights reserved.
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Re. a hundred thousand times - a Ghazal
26th Jul 2016 12:53pm
I read this 100,000 times
And in each read I loved
Each word, each rhyme
I felt you could see me
100,000 eyes
And somehow felt all of those
Eyes were mine
For sharing some spirit
Embracing our mind
I say thank you to you
One hundred thousand times
100,000 eternities
Of peace and love to you
- D
And in each read I loved
Each word, each rhyme
I felt you could see me
100,000 eyes
And somehow felt all of those
Eyes were mine
For sharing some spirit
Embracing our mind
I say thank you to you
One hundred thousand times
100,000 eternities
Of peace and love to you
- D
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Re: Re. a hundred thousand times - a Ghazal
26th Jul 2016 1:01pm
Hey Bro, I thank you much more than a hundred thousand times for your lovely and generous appreciation. your feedback is much beaut than the poem itself. Thank you once again...apart from the hundred thousand thanks said before!!
Cheers!
KDAmB
Cheers!
KDAmB
Re. a hundred thousand times - a Ghazal
26th Jul 2016 4:35pm
this is great KDAmB so clever it put a smile on my face from the radiance of it :)
love Brenda
love Brenda
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Re: Re. a hundred thousand times - a Ghazal
26th Jul 2016 4:41pm
Welcome dear friend! I am glad it made you smile. Now I feel it was worth writing and I thank you for you very kind and generous appreciation!
Cheers!
KDAmB
Cheers!
KDAmB
Re. a hundred thousand times - a Ghazal
Anonymous
26th Jul 2016 4:40pm
Such a beautiful piece.
Full of meaning and heartfelt emotion.
Great write.
Full of meaning and heartfelt emotion.
Great write.
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Re: Re. a hundred thousand times - a Ghazal
26th Jul 2016 4:46pm
Welcome and Thank you for your kind appreciation and keen insight my friend... glad you too saw what was attempted at conveying..... the emotions and feelings...
Thank you!
KDAmB
Thank you!
KDAmB
Re. a hundred thousand times - a Ghazal
26th Jul 2016 5:04pm
I have no clue forms but
your words are befitting
and nourishing.
-Howlings
your words are befitting
and nourishing.
-Howlings
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Re: Re. a hundred thousand times - a Ghazal
26th Jul 2016 5:11pm
MsWhelms, your presence and appreciation of the emotions is more important to me than the forms I try to convey my emotions in. I cannot thank you enough for your generosity!! Thank you once more!!
Cheers
KDAmB
Cheers
KDAmB
Re. a hundred thousand times - a Ghazal
Anonymous
26th Jul 2016 9:15pm
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Re: Re. a hundred thousand times - a Ghazal
26th Jul 2016 10:52pm
Welcome Elario and Thank You for your kind appreciation. It is indeed intended to be sung, as a ghazal is poetic work which is even better with music.... appreciate your keen eye and your visit!!
Cheers!
KDAmB
Cheers!
KDAmB
Re. a hundred thousand times - a Ghazal
27th Jul 2016 6:26am
Re: Re. a hundred thousand times - a Ghazal
27th Jul 2016 9:06am
If ever a shadow is welcome here it's your one Bro! Thank you for your kind appreciation and support! means a lot!
Cheers!
KDAmB
Cheers!
KDAmB
Re. a hundred thousand times - a Ghazal
27th Jul 2016 7:23pm
only a true poet can evoke such emotion in their reader - you have certainly done so with this awe inspiring piece :-)
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Re: Re. a hundred thousand times - a Ghazal
28th Jul 2016 9:41am
Dave! am truly humbled by your high praise...especially from a poet of your stature whom I respect a lot!! Heartfelt Thank You for your kind encouragemen and support!! Always welcome here!
Cheers!
KDAmB
Cheers!
KDAmB
Re. a hundred thousand times - a Ghazal
30th Jul 2016 10:17pm
I loved reading this, KD! There's something refreshing and authentic about your words.
Really loved the way you bookend this piece.
Pen Respect~
Really loved the way you bookend this piece.
Pen Respect~
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Re: Re. a hundred thousand times - a Ghazal
30th Jul 2016 10:21pm
Welcome and Thank You! am delighted that you loved this scribble. Truly appreciate your kind gesture! thank you!!
regards
KDAmB
regards
KDAmB
Re. a hundred thousand times - a Ghazal
Anonymous
12th Aug 2016 2:22am
I thoroughly enjoyed this. Rhymes, especially with such repetition, can often come across as cute, and while I did grin a bit at the rhymes and mimes, there's some real heart in this.
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Re: Re. a hundred thousand times - a Ghazal
12th Aug 2016 9:39am
welcome MarieKeys! I appreciate your very kind feedback, time and visit very much! I am glad you saw the heart behind the rhymes... once again a big Thank You for your kind gesture!
Cheers!
KDAmB
Cheers!
KDAmB